THE DEATH OF SUPERMAN (REMIX) - PARKER MCCOMBE [I’ve used remix there because it’s important to note this uses Superman issue 75 as a jumping off point for how I felt that story should have ended and therefore contains some elements of it. Also, because I am a dork.]
Panel 1: Splash page. Superman and Doomsday punch each other with a joint, devastating, final blow.
Cap: LIKE WEARY BOXERS WHO HAVE GONE THE DISTANCE, THE COMBATANTS COLLIDE IN ONE LAST, EXPLOSIVE EFFORT.
Cap: IN THE YEARS TO COME A FEW WITNESSES WILL TELL OF THE POWER OF THESE FINAL PUNCHES… THAT THEY COULD LITERALLY FEEL THE SHOCKWAVES.
Cap: OTHERS WILL REMEMBER THE ENORMOUS CRATER THAT RESULTED FROM THE SHEER FORCE OF THE BLOWS.
Close up of Jimmy Olson and Lois Lane, shocked faces behind Jimmy’s camera. The reflection in Jimmy’s camera lens is of Superman and Doomsday reeling from their final punches
Cap: BUT MOST WILL REMEMBER THIS SAD DAY –
Wide shot as we see smoke clearing over the two broken bodies of Superman and Doomsday.
Cap: --AS THE DAY THE PROUDEST AND MOST NOBLE MAN THEY EVER KNEW–
Close up of Doomsday’s hand as it twitches.
The same close up of Doomsday’s hand, but this time as it falls dead.
Cap: --DEFEATED DOOMSDAY–
Close up of Superman’s hand. It’s hanging lifeless.
Close up of Superman’s hand again, only this time gripping a piece of rubble.
Superman in silhouette, standing up, we can see from his posture it’s not easy, but he’s managing it.
Cap: --AROSE IN VICTORY–
Shot of Superman from below - battered - his costume torn, but standing up straight now, statuesque and noble as we see smoke clearing to reveal the sun above him as it shines down.
Wide shot as Superman walks forward, victorious, towards a cheering crowd.
Close up of Superman, head and shoulders, as he winces, showing sharp pain in his face.
Slightly wider shot showing Superman as his legs give way and he falls to his knees.
Cap: --AND THEN FINALLY FELL.
Medium shot. Lois, still beside Jimmy, screams out, running towards him.
Splash panel taking up bottom half of the page showing Lois holding Superman, Jimmy beside her, both distraught.
Jimmy: SOMEONE CALL THE PARAMEDICS.
Shot of an ambulance rushing through the streets of Metropolis.
Jonathan and Martha Kent, putting on their coats as we see them in their hall, about to leave their house.
Close up of a heart monitor showing a heartbeat, Superman, still alive, but weakening.
SFX: BLEEP BLEEP BLEEP
We see Superman lying on operating table as doctors work on him. Lois is being pulled away and told to leave.
Surgeon #1: WE HAVE MULTIPLE INTERNAL CONTUSIONS.
Surgeon #2: HE’S HEMMORAGING. WE’RE GOING TO HAVE TO OPERATE RIGHT NOW TO STOP THE BLEEDING.
Nurse (to Lois): YOU CAN’T BE HERE, MS. LANE, YOU NEED TO LEAVE.
Close up of an operating scalpel about to cut into Superman’s skin.
Second, similar close up, only this time we see the Scalpel snapping instead of breaking Superman’s skin.
Surgeon #1 looks towards Surgeon #2, eyes widened.
Surgeon #1: THAT’S THE THIRD ONE WE’VE BROKEN.
Surgeon #1: THAT ONE WAS DIAMOND TIPPED.
Shot of surgeon #2 looking out of operating theatre window, shaking his head. In the foreground we see he’s shaking his head at a man in a suit, a chief consultant for the hospital.
We see this chief consultant (he can be wearing a name badge explaining who he is, for clarity) in a medium shot standing beside Lois, looking down at her now sitting in a chair with her head in her hands.
Chief Consultant: MS. LANE, I WOULDN’T ASK THIS UNLESS IT WAS VITALLY IMPORTANT. IS THERE A WAY TO DEPOWER SUPERMAN? IS THERE A WAY WE CAN CUT THROUGH SUPERMAN’S SKIN?
Close up of Lois looking up at the consultant, tears in her eyes, still.
Cap: THE TERRIBLE IRONY OF THE MAN OF STEEL’S IMPENETRABLE SKIN –
Cap: --HIS GREATEST POWER, ONE THAT ALLOWED BULLETS TO BOUNCE OFF HIM, NOW BECOMING HIS GREATEST WEAKNESS, PREVENTING HIM FROM GETTING THE LIFE SAVING MEDICAL ATTENTION ANY NORMAL HUMAN MAN COULD EXPECT–
Wide shot of The Flash speeding across country terrain.
Cap: --THE RESPONSIBILITY FOR SUPERMAN’S SALVATION NOW RESTED WITH HIS FELLOW HEROES–
Medium shot. From behind, The Flash passes a sign saying ‘Welcome to Gotham.’
Cap: --MEN WHO WOULD GLADLY GIVE THERE LIFE FOR HIS, IF THEY COULD.
And again from behind as we see him run through the gates of Wayne Manor
Cut to Alfred quickly walking down steps into Batcave with The Flash.
Alfred: MASTER BRUCE HAS TOLD ME TIME IS OF THE ESSENCE SO I’VE TAKEN THE LIBERTY OF TAKING WHAT YOU NEED FROM THE VAULT.
Alfred: HE WILL FOLLOW AS SOON AS HE CAN.
Medium shot again as, from behind the two men, in shadow in the foreground, we see a chunk of Kryptonite sitting waiting for The Flash to collect.
A close up of their both Alfred and The Flash, their faces bathed a little in the green glow of the alien rock.
Alfred: IT GOES WITHOUT SAYING, NO DOUBT, THAT THIS MUST BE CAREFULLY LOOKED AFTER UNTIL MASTER BRUCE ARRIVES.
Medium shot. The Flash, from behind, running past a ‘You Are Now Leaving Gotham’ sign.
Small panel overlay. Superman’s heartbeat from heart monitor.
Close up of surgical staff.
Surgeon #2: TRY 10CCS OF ADRENALINE.
Wide shot. Red streak of the Flash running along a country lane.
Small panel overlay. Superman’s heart beat again, weakening now.
Close up. A hypodermic needle breaks on Superman’s skin.
Close up of The Flash’s face. We can seem the agony and determination of how hard he is running.
Small Panel Overlay. Superman’s heartbeat, slightly weaker again.
Medium shot. Lois and the Kent’s, having now arrived in the hospital, standing along side one another, looking in through the window of the operating theatre. In the foreground we see the silhouette of the medical staff working on Superman.
Close up of Martha taking Lois’ hand.
Close up - head and shoulders - as Lois looks around at Martha, the feeling of being accepted as a daughter and as important in Clark’s life showing in her face, Martha looking on, not noticing or realising how much this means, making the moment even more heartfelt and poignant for Lois and our readers.
Close up of Surgeon #1, eyes distraught, operating mask falling away as he desperately tries to fill another needle with epinephrine.
Surgeon #1: WE’RE LOSING HIM.
Close up of heart monitor as heartbeat turns into a flat line.
Medium shot of The Flash from behind, entering the outskirts of Metropolis.
Medium shot as the medical team attempt to shock Superman’s heart into life again.
Surgeon #2: CLEAR.
SFX: --EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE* SHUNKK
Close up of Lois’ face as a tear rolls down her cheek.
Close up overlay panel. Heartbeat monitor starts again but heartbeat still in flat line.
Medium shot as medics make another attempt to shock Superman back to life. The silhouette of his body is jerking upwards and convulses under the blast of electric.
Surgeon #2: FULL POWER. CLEAR.
SFX: --EEEEEEEEEEEEEEE* SHUNKK
Medium shot of The Flash as he runs up to the doors of, and into, Metropolis City Hospital.
Medium shot as The Flash comes to a stop beside a distraught looking Jimmy Olson.
Cap: FOR THOSE WHO LOVED HIM–
Cap: --ONE WHO WOULD BE HIS PAL–
Another medium shot, this time from The Flash’s point of view, him and Jimmy’s shadows in the foreground as we see the Kents and Lois Lane in a solemn group hug.
Cap: --ONE WHO WOULD CALL HIM HUSBAND–
Cap: --OR THOSE WHO WOULD CALL HIM SON–
Cap: --THIS IS THE DARKEST DAY THEY COULD EVER IMAGINE.
Close up double head-shot as Jimmy turns to The Flash letting him know he’s arrived too late. The look of absolute devastation on The Flash’s face should hopefully mirror exactly what the audience is feeling while reading.
Cap: AND FOR THOSE WHO SERVED ALONGSIDE SUPERMAN IN THE PROTECTION OF LIFE–
Jimmy Olson: HE’S GONE.
Close up, small overlay panel as we see the Kryptonite fall from Wally’s hand.
Cap: --COMES THE SHOCK OF FAILURE–
Similar small overlay panel showing close up of the green rock as it lands and rolls onto the floor.
Cap: --AND THE WEIGHT OF BEING TOO LATE TO HELP.
Half page panel shows Superman’s now lifeless body on the operating table from the neck down. We don’t show his face, focusing on the ripped Superman symbol of his costume and his cape hanging over the side and onto the floor.
Cap: FOR THIS IS THE DAY–
A final overlay panel across the bottom of the page showing the heartbeat flat line, just to underline both the above panel and the moment itself.
Cap: --THAT A SUPERMAN DIED.