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Script Practice Looking for Critiques

I’m attempting to become a better writer, trying (and only failing most of the time) to write a short script every week and would appreciate any and all critiques on my drafts. Here is an 1st draft of a simple fantasy plot.

The Demon’s Fraud

*Footnote, should it ever get to the point that art accompanies the script page 8 & 9 are for the artist to play around with. But feel free to critique that section as well, if you feel it’s beneficial.

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Taking comments and edit suggestions from some various readers, here’s the revised version of “The Demon’s Fraud”.