Just in case it isn't clear, text sometimes causing a lack of intonation/ etc. I'm neither on the attack nor defending anything. I keep engaging solely because I find this kind of discussion intriguing. I sincerely hope no one I responded to thought I was attacking, or attempting to tear anyone down here. This has all been in the spirit of hopefully being of some help to folks as they move forward. Honestly I'd get a kick out of seeing everybody in this thread continuing on, and getting their own stuff out their in the world.
I in no way am intending to come off as some sort of authority on any of the crit I've left. It's all highly subjective, and one size certainly doesn't fit all. I'm sure there's plenty of perfectly valid work out there you respond to strongly that I wouldn't or vice versa. To me that's great, I genuinely hope everyone finds their audience.
Actually you're exactly right here. I was conflating yours with another of the scripts I read.
I think what caught me on your 10 panel page had more to do with geometry than anything. Since I made a mistake previously by talking in generalities, I'll go into a little detail. Again as always, just my perspective, and certainly no attack or sleight meant by this, but this was the basic math going through my head reading your page 3:
A finished and printed standard comics page is 10.25" tall. Roughly an 1/8" or so top and bottom is trim area (usually a little more bottom, and a little less top), if you want complete rectangular borders you're better off thinking of the page as 10" tall.
Now with 10" to work with you still need to likely take away for gutter space. Maybe the artist can get away with 1/16", but an 1/8" is a whole lot easier to make look tidy after considering the width of the pen/stroke of the line that needs to box it out. To get 6 tiers, you'll need at least 5 horizontal run gutters. That's over another 1/2" of space taken up at the more likely measurement, and close to half an inch at the tighter measurement. For sake of easy math, we'll call it an even 1/2". This leave 9 1/2 inches of total vertical live drawing space on the page.
Your call is for tiers 1 and 6 to be smaller so that adds some space to the other 4. But even to pull off this kind of variation you're now looking at panels 1 & 10 on this page being about an inch high, or approximately the height of a postage stamp. In shrinking these two tiers each of the other 4 equally sized tiers manages to be about 1.8" tall.
I wouldn't say there are no artists out there that can pull off a detailed shot of a soldier that needs to be recognizable, looking bored,in uniform firing his rifle, having his face dramatically lit by muzzle blast, as his spent cartridges fly around him with a second soldiers head visible in the foreground and a field lit by an evening sky all at an inch high. (1.5" tall drawing if he/she is working traditionally at 150%)
But I would daresay that kind of artist is likely pretty thin on the ground.
The other stuff about formatting is intriguing, and continuing that line of discussion might bear fruit, it also might be best left to messaging or a thread unto itself as to not kidnap this one. I've been busy this week so hadn't had the time needed to sit down and look at any more, but hopefully someone can get the feedback train re-jumpstarted. I learn a ton from this kind of process personally.