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The old thread can be found at this link - there is already some great talent but let everyone see your latest pitches and art pages here.
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If any artists are out there looking for a published writer to collab with then please consider moi.

I have several 3-5 page scripts that we could work on.

I'm the EIC of FluxUK comics, but I am primarily a writer. Below are several scripts I have kicking around, followed by the synopsis and sample page of one of the scripts.

1/. All The Worlds A Stage

A man is crossing the road when he's hit by a bus.

Blackness. A void.

He comes around to see workmen removing the scenery of the world and we see that this mans entire existence (and by extension - everyone's existence) is nothing but a construction, a stage-show in which we all play our parts. Bewildered, the man bumps into the stage manager who quickly jumps on his radio to 'The Director' and tells him he's got a 'waker'. he takes the man to meet The Director.

They pass through an infinite warehouse which houses billions of similar 'cubicles', people living out their lives in ignorance.

Our protagonist is then greeted by The Director in a control room with millions of monitors, each monitor showing a person playing their part in the theatre of life. The man pleads to go back to his normal life, but the Director offers him the chance to have any life he wants. The man asks him how that could possibly be, the Director tells him "You were always able to change your life, you just forgot how." We close on our man being closed into a new 'Cubicle' arms spread like Da Vinci's Vitruvian Man, charged by the knowledge that he can be whatever his imagination permits.

End.

2/. Limber

Our protagonist is a paraplegic. He's given the chance to undergo radical surgery, the implantation of a neural control chip, which will aloow him to regain use of his limbs. He takes the chance and is amazed when the surgery works. He starts sleeping very poorly and comes to one night in bed covered in blood. He discovers that he has been committing murders in his sleep. He goes back to the clinic who tell him that yes, they have been controlling him, using the chip to control his limbs and his unconscious mind to murder political/industrial rivals. The man flees and is pursued by the clinics agents. He throws himself before a train, rather than be used as a weapon against his will. His body is mangled in the accident.

He awakens in the hospital again with the head of the clinic leaning over him, telling him that they are about to put him through a new procedure, phase two, a totally bionic body powered by a human brain...his brain...which will be under their full control.

End.

3/. Who's that talking in my head.

A high powered business man is in the middle of giving a presentation to a board of trustees when he begins to hear a voice in his head telling him that the world will come to an end. After ruining his presentation he is fired and eventiually goes along with the voice's instructions. After being mistaken for a terrorist, he ends up atop a sky-scraper with the worlds camera's on him. He declares the end is coming only for the voice to discover that it's dialed the wrong number and has got the wrong world.

The last we see of our man he is being carted away in an ambulance wrapped up in a straight jacket.

end.

Do any of those stories interest you?

Look forward to hearing from you.

As stated above, I attach the intro, synopsis and the first page below of one of my other scripts called "Afterbirth" for your perusal. I look forward to hearing from you.

Synopsis.

We open on a dark door, light spills all around the gaps between the door and the frame, lending the frame the air of a horror film.

We can hear an agonising scream coming from behind the door.

Cut to inside the bathroom, the wife is in the bath, she's giving birth. We can tell that she is in real danger. The husband is screaming down the phone to an operator on the other end who is guiding him through the birth.

A tearing noise. A torrent of blood. A single scream cut short. The father stops talking and drops the phone. What he's looking at is not a baby.

What happens next?

If you are an artist and are interested in finding out, I have the complete 5 page script ready to send to you. If you love horror with a massive twist, then this script is for you.

Title: AFTERBIRTH.

Written by JP Fitch.

Glossary:
CU - Close Up
MS - Medium Shot
LS - Long Shot
MC/U - Medium Close Up
OTS - Over the Shoulder shot
POV - Point of View

Intro -

Do you like horror? Do you go for gore? Are you an afficianado of phsychological scares?..then this is the script for you. This script has all of the aforementioned horror motifs, but mostly it plays on primordial fears over gross out gore.
The spectre of childbirth is a fascinating, visceral experience, it is also the most primeval and traumatic experience in the human lifetime. We all went through it and most of us will ewitmess it from the other side as we witness our children emerge,struggle into the world to take their first agonising breath. Every child emerges with a scream.
The child in this story, isn't a normal child. It isn't even human. But that's not the most shocking part of this story. You are a brave soul for venturing this far, i assure you, for what lies beyond this introduction will play on your mind, nay, your soul perhaps for a few hours, maybe for a few days...maybe, just maybe as you watch your wife (or if you are a woman as you lie there, grimacing, strugggling, panting, this story will skitter up your spine into the front of your brain and will scream in your ear - "It's your turn!"

As is the caveat with most scripts, if you can find a better way of representing what you read here, please (if you understand what i'm reaching for) by all means go for it.

Cheers.

JP


Page 1.

1/. Open on a a darkened door. MC/U. Light spills from the crack between the door and the doorjam, lending the frame an eerie air.

A scream comes from the door, a yell of agony and desperation.

WIFE (O/P): AAAAUUUHH...

HUSBAND: OH...GAH! THERE'S B-BLOOD...BREATHE...BREATHE BABY.

2/. Int. Inside Bathroom. Large panel. M/S. The wife is in the bath, she's in a flesh coloured bra. Her legs are open, up on the sides of the bath, (but we can't see anything rude!). Her stomach is distended, swollen beyond natural lengths. The veins on her stomach are clearly visible, red and blue and purple.
The husband is holding a mobile phone up to his ear, he's being talked through the birth by a voice on the other end of the phone. He bends over the side of the bath looking down at his wife's crotch.

WIFE: OH...OH...OOOOH...

HUSBAND: DIALATED? WHAT DOES..? OH...IT'S WIDER THAN MY HAND...

WIFE: OOOOH GAAAAWD...

HUSBAND: TEN CENTIMETERS? Y-YEAH, I MEAN IT'S WIDER...MUCH WIDER, I THINK...DAMNIT I DON'T KNOW!

3/. MC/U. Top down shot. We're looking directly down onto the wife, we can see her from the bottom of her stomach upwards. She lies in the bath, legs akimbo. She's looking down at her stomach in horror as it distends further out. We can see a blunt point rising in the centre of her stomach.

WIFE: NOT YET! NOOOO!

HUSBAND (O/P): OH GOD! OH SHIT! PLEASE HURRY!

4/. Ext. L/S. Low angle looking up at the house. The house is pretty much in darkness, except from the light from the bathroom upstairs which shines out onto the street. It's night-time. With a screech, a vehicle pulls up. We see from underneath the front bumper. Two men in unifrom, one of them holding what looks like a bag, run towards the house in the darkness. The ominous moon, replsendant in it's yellow pallour, sits full above the roof of the house.

WIFE: AAAAAH!

5/. EC/U on wife's stomach. The rising point now looks like it's ready to burst through her stomach.

HUSBAND: OH...OH BABY, THEY'RE COMING. HOLD ON BABY!

WIFE: AAH-YEEEE


Cheers

JP
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I'll throw my hat into the ring for an artist to submit with of my very own. This five pager is called "It's Only a Day Away" and it goes a little something like this.

A one, a two, a one, two three four.

It's Only A Day Away

The Chancellor of Earth is a man who has lost faith in the people he leads. It seems that bickering and politics has taken the place of progress. In order to put an end to petty squabbles the Chancellor does what any good leader would do and makes the newest available technology a weapon. Using the first time machine to deliver a doomsday bomb 24 hours into the future, the chancellor plans to see everyone put aside their differences and work toward tomorrow before it's gone. Unfortunately, the shocking video of their future being destroyed only seems to escalate the people's fear of change, leaving a small group of scientist to save the day whilst rioters and anarchists fight amongst the screaming crying masses and drug fueled street orgies of those in denial. The heroes decide to send a message into space pleading for help but for their troubles they're gifted a warlord race of migrant aliens who destroy all life on Earth before the bomb even has a chance to do it's job. The aliens use their natural ability to evolve symbiotically with their new home planet and become human in appearance. All of this happens in just under 24 hours. The story ends with the alien's being wiped out on camera by a bomb they never saw coming.

And here we have page one of the story. If it gets your mouth (or other bits) all wet then let me know so that we may become COMIC CREATORS and live meagerly as misunderstood Gods amongst mouth breathers.

PAGE ONE

Panel One: Overlooking a slightly futuristic city. Vehicles are more square, buildings are crowned with small broadcast antennae. In the streets people move to work or shopping destinations.

CAPTION: My fellow man, it pleases me to be the first to tell you that we've achieved a great milestone for humanity today. The picture you're seeing right now is the future. Twenty four hours from now to be exact.

Panel Two: The Grand Chancellor of Earth, a man in his forties, stands before us looking directly into our eyes. His clothes are professional but a bit disheveled. Behind him are two rows of flags with something akin to the United Nations emblem between them.

CHANCELLOR: Glorious news was brought to me today, announcing the completion of MK-TOMORROW.

CHANCELLOR: Rather than sending in the chrononauts, I have asked that this camera be sent forward so that everyone on Earth can witness this future.

Panel Three: The Chancellor closes his eyes and rubs his forehead with his hand as if trying to relieve an unstoppable headache.

CHANCELLOR: I'm just so tired.

Panel Four: The Chancellor points towards us.

CHANCELLOR: I'm tired of all of you.

CHANCELLOR: I've tried, and tried to no avail to move our world forward but I'm met with constant roadblocks and derailment.

CHANCELLOR: Because YOU refuse to put your bickering aside for progress.

Panel Four: The Chancellor holds a remote control up in his left hand and smiles.

CHANCELLOR: No more. No more pretending that it'll be done tomorrow. No more waiting.

Panel Five: The scene of the future is racked by an overarching white light that draws shadows out onto streets. People shield their eyes, cars overturn, the blast is so powerful that panel, the world, breaks apart and turns to dust as it moves towards the right.

CAPTION: You have 24 hours to make progress. 24 hours to make the change you want to see in this world.

CAPTION: No one else is going to do it now, because I've killed the future.
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Hello all you lovely artists out there!

I'm a writer (big surprise). I've never been published but I've studied screenwriting for four years - I have an undergraduate degree and a masters degree in Screenwriting (not that you need a qualification to write, but I'm always dedicated to learning more). It's something I'm really passionate about and I'm sure you'll see that in my work.

I currently have four Space Oddities scripts which I'm looking to work with artists on (I figure it's good to offer some choice). They are 'Dangerous Element', 'The Overseer', 'Monster' and 'War Games'. If you'd like me to give you a synopsis or send you the scripts, then message me.

Writing is what I want to do with my life, so if you're as passionate about art as I am about writing then I'm sure we'll make a great team.

I hope some people decide to get in touch with me.

Edited by Paul Penna, 25 November 2010 - 12:20 AM.

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Hi there, another writer looking for artist, have been published, but not with my fiction yet alas, although did win a runner up T-shirt for a film script for SCiFi shorts, also was a winner of 2001 Fresh Talent writing contest judged by a local writer, Warren Ellis, yep I live in Southend!

Anyway here's the first page of my space oddity script exploring how technology may affect our sexuality, Designer Babies. If you are interested, let us know and we'll sort out the rest.

DESIGNER BABIES

By Cliff Homewood


Panel 1

Caption:

It started small...

A mans nether regions, not very well endowed.

Caption, in smaller text:

ahem.

That's me.

Panel 2

Caption:

First came Viagra, but no amount of the drug could solve my problem. The quantities could be huge, but the obstacle would still be small.

A lady laughing.

Panel 3

Caption:

Then came Groma.

Naked, he has his back to the camera, we can see the pleasant surprise on the ladies face.

Caption:

Needless to say, my problems were cured.

Panel 4

Him, sad face looking out at us.

Caption:

At least for a little while.

Panel 5

Caption:

Problem is, with everyone trying it...

A row of naked men facing towards us, shoulders up (this has to go out in the supermarkets don't you know?), above them we can see the banner 'Penis Growing Contest'.

Panel 6

Caption:

Women were soon outsized!

Women standing there defiant, with arms crossed, definitely not.

So that's how it starts, let us know if you want to see the complete script.
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And another humourous submission for Space Oddities from me (depending on your sense of humour). Again I submit the beginning of it, this time just the first scene. Again if any artists are interested let us know, and will finish the piece of, am willing to listen to ideas from the right artist and incorporate them if I think they're a good fit. This one is Top Ten?astro City like, depicting a society where superpowers arrive for everyone in adolescence as your body changes. So our main characters are two teenage boys speculating about superpowers and what theirs might turn out to be...


A SUPERPOWERED SOCIETY

By Cliff Homewood


PANEL 1

We open on a close up of a white shirt unbuttoned to reveal Supermans chest, displayed in all its glory, rich blue with that mighty logo. Over the top of which comes our title "Super Powered Society".

PANEL 2

We pull back slightly to see Superman is actually a janitor cleaning the floor in the Mens toilets.

PANEL 3

We see a couple of lads coming towards us, and the sinks.

STEVE: Did you see Snake on the telly last night?

MIKE: Oh fuck yeah man, that battle scene, that was hilarious.

PANEL 4

Massive army of burly blokes, aggressive, attacking.

PANEL 5

We see Snake, our hero, to the left and the army attacking to the right. He has held one hand up towards them. The front row of the aggressors have stopped in their tracks, looking puzzled as they feel their nether regions.

STEVE: Yeah especially when they realised his power was to control the size of your genitals.

PANEL 6

The army has parted to both sides, allowing snake, our hero a path through them.

MIKE: it was like fucking Moses man.

STEVE: Yeah you may kill a Man, but leave a Man a Man for fucks sake.

PANEL 7

Back to Steve & Mike now leaving the sinks and comig out of the toilets. Behind them we can see the janitor still mopping up.

MIKE: That poor sap he zapped at the front looking down at his genitals.

STEVE: My dick has gone up inside of me!

PANEL 8

STEVE: That's not a dick, that's a fucking vagina.

MIKE: Yeah man, awesome power!

The janitor is looking up at them from his duties.

STEVE: What about supes out there cleaning up, what's his special power?

MIKE: dorkiness.

His face sadly acknowledges this.
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http://%3ca%20href=/Posted Image">http://%3ca%20href=/Posted Image">Hello,

I'm a comic artist.

I'd be very interested with working with some of you guys....if you'd like to see examples of my work go to

http://s1207.photobu...74/the_gillock/

or



Hope to hear from you soon

Graeme

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Edited by graemehoward, 30 November 2010 - 10:07 PM.

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Would love to work with you if interested, as you can see the last two scripts are the first pages of a couple of story ideas, I realise that both have a sexual nature to the humour, this isn't always the case, was trying out ideas how to keep a story short, and keeping it light is one idea, hence the humour if you like it, I do have other ideas milling around as well if interested, haven't got around to posting them yet, next I was going to submit a couple of ideas for iconic hero, not sure if they totally fit the bill, one 'The Legend of Colin Good' a retelling of Robin Hood as political satire as we still suffer from the government taxing us, with mental patients in the main role after their hospital gets closed down in the first ep. The other a more traditional Dan Dare/Buck Rogers/Farscape type story where our hero is a WW2 spitfire pilot transported to a world of the future, where everything, including the people are controlled by a master computer and he has to survive a utopia where he doesn't fit in, the iconography being flying a spitfire in a futuristic city, shased by flying cars.

AS I said have a few more ideas for 5 pager Space Odditys as well, so let us know if you are interested in drawing my work.
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We have a gang, if Graeme Howard is interested in doing for the art for any of my pieces and woudl like Hatiq to letter it for him. Heres another piece I wrote a few years ago, if you like it will have a look to see if I can tighten it and drop a few panels, because I notice it is 8 a page, which is a lot. The First panel can go for instance as it just contains a visual reference to Philip K Dick's The Man in the High Castle. Graeme could you give me your email address if you'd like to see more, prefer not to post full scripts on here if possible, and the forums wouldn't let me access members details.

Jesus Shows The Way

By Cliff Homewood

NOTE TO ARTIST: Certain scenes are images from the book our protagonist is reading. I suggest that these scenes should have their panels designed with a page from a book framing device so that readers don’t get confused with the two different realities depicted.





PAGE 1



PANEL 1:

Boys POV. We can see a book lying on his desk, it’s ‘The Man in the High Castle’ by Philip K. Dick. In the foreground in his black hand he is holding a book called ‘Jesus Shows the Way’.



CAPTION (All of the captions form a book review, its up to the letterer how this is depicted):

I’ve been asked to review this book.



PANEL 2 + 3:

The first panel shows a Policeman killing a white civilian in public, the second shows a farmer killing an animal in a field in exactly the same manner. The composition of the panels should be the same to show they are both doing the same job; only the backgrounds, clothes and victims are different.



CAPTION (runs underneath both of the panels, combining them into one):

It portrays a cruel, vile society where Jesus never taught that all of God’s creatures are equal and what we inflict on animals we must be willing to suffer ourselves.



PANEL 4

Close up on boy.



CAPTION:

This is a harsh rule. I hate it.



PANEL 5.

A Policeman shooting a black man in the back.



CAPTION:

The Police shot my older brother.





PANEL 6.

A black arm being chopped up on a kitchen board.



BOTTOM CAPTION:

Food.



PANEL 7:

Close up of the photo standing on the boy’s desk of him and his brother.



BOTTOM CAPTION:

I know we all have to give but I cannot help but miss him.



PANEL 8:

Birds Eye POV. Sitting at the dinner table staring down at the food on the plate before him. The knife and fork haven’t been touched.



TOP CAPTION:

I couldn’t eat for two days, I sat staring at the meat on my plate.



BOTTOM CAPTION:

My Parents had to get me eating before the Police came around.





PAGE 2



PANEL 9:

He is staring up at Jesus on a crucifix hanging on a wall staring sadly staring down at him.



CAPTION:

Why does it have to be this way?



PANEL 10 (TV IMAGE):

A black woman being beaten by Police with truncheons she has her arm extended outwards as she looks with fear/hope towards



PANEL 11 (TV IMAGE):

Her son. We can just see details of the Police beating her in the corner of the frame as the boy runs.



PANEL 12 (TV IMAGE):

A white family sitting around the table as the wife hands out the meat. There is no visible indication that it is human meat.



PANEL 13 (TV IMAGE):

The TV is now showing footage of Martin Luther King.





MARTIN LUTHER KING:

The persecution of the black is unfair and sacrilegious. When Jesus said all animals should be treated equally he included the white and the black.



PANEL 14:

Pull back from the TV slightly to see the boy watching it. A black woman is presenting.



PRESENTER:

Just a reminder how far we have come as scientists say we are nearly ready for vegetarianism.



BOTTOM CAPTION:

Not to worry, Heaven is nearly here.



PANEL 15:

Back to his desk. He is either writing in his book, or sitting at a typewriter depending how the lettering for the captions is to be done.



CAPTION:

I digress, back to the book, ‘Jesus Shows The Way’, its title pointing out the cruel mockery they call religion.







PANEL 16 (Book image):

Image of a fat bloke sitting in his arm chair eating his way through a bunch of ribs, he is littered in discarded rib bones, and sauce dribbles down his chin onto his stained t-shirt.



CAPTION:

It describes people rolling monstrously in fat, giving no thought to what they eat as they do not suffer.



PAGE 3



PANEL 17 (Book image):

Close up of a plate full of uneaten ribs being thrown into a bin besides the chair.



CAPTION:

Caring for nothing but themselves, man does not respect his environment. Oh, to follow a false prophet!



PANEL 18 (Book image):

A row of battery hens, packed in their cages so tight they cannot move.



CAPTION:

They are experts at genocide; Man has become cruel and heartless. They don’t eat animals equally, preferring to pick ‘favourites’



PANEL 19 (Book image):

Close up of a hen, looking out from its cage.



CAPTION:

Liking their meat well cooked so they don’t see the blood.



PANEL 21:

Farmer shooting a cow.



CAPTION:

Preferring others to do the killing for them.



PANEL 22:

Close up on the dead cow’s face.



CAPTION:

They Eat in Peace.



PANEL 23:

Close up of the photo on his desk.



BOTTOM CAPTION (italics):

I now know why my teacher gave me this book, it reminds that through pain comes compassion.



Panel 24 (Book image):

Newspaper picture of cattle burning because of foot and mouth with appropriate headline.



CAPTION:

Believe it or not, murder is more common in their society! As well as murdering animals in millions with little thought, Man murders himself more.





PAGE 4



PANEL 25:

Police shooting somebody.



BOTTOM CAPTION:

Not the random sort, carried out by the Police, but the obnoxious variety, for greed. They allow it to happen because guilty men are released as acts of ‘compassion’!



PANEL 26 (Book image):

Man walking away from Prison, finally a free man!



BOTTOM CAPTION:

As a realistic depiction of an alternate society it is ridiculous.





PANEL 27:

Boys POV. He’s in the street, close up of white people walking by, as one turns and looks at him with a look of utter hatred on her face.



CAPTION:

Racism in their society is close to being cured. People hate me because I’m black, I know I can see it in their faces.



PANEL 28:

A flashback to the past. We’re in an outhouse, where a black servant family live. They are quaking with fear, huddled against the back as the Master has walked in.



CAPTION:

Blacks have little friends.



PANEL 29:

Close up on the slaves and their sheer terror as his hand grabs hold of the male.



CAPTION:

White’s prefer when we were slaves



PANEL 30 - 31:

The Master is framed in the light of the open door as he drags the protesting slave with him towards it.



PANEL 32:

The door is now closed.



CAPTION:

because then our flesh got eaten, not theirs.







PAGE 5



PANEL 33:

Close up of a white person looking at him in hatred.



CAPTION:

So when their brother gets killed they look with hate, you can see it in their eyes, brandishing.



PANEL 34:

The boy standing alone on the pavement.



CAPTION:

I want to shout back, ‘I lost my brother too, you bastards’.









PANEL 35:

White people walking by.



CAPTION:

Jesus taught us against victimisation, unfortunately his lesson takes a long time to be learnt.



PANEL 36:

Close up of the crucifix on his wall again.



CAPTION:

Sometimes I HATE Jesus, especially when I stare at the meat on my plate and wonder if it’s anybody I know.



PANEL 37:

The photo of him and his brother.



CAPTION:

The followings of the book’s Jesus seem easier. Who cares if Dodos would be extinct? At least my brother would be alive.





PANEL 38:

A Dodo.



CAPTION:

It doesn’t matter anymore. Scientists say we are ready to make the change. I will never have to eat meat again.



PANEL 39:

Black presenter smiling,



CAPTION:

Heaven is here.



Ends.


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If there is anyone who wants to do a story about a prophet at the end of his life, drop me a line. I'm a writer. Looking for an artist.
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Do you have any examples of your lettering, Hatiq?

I'm working with a couple of artists on CLiNT submissions, so a letterer down the line would be useful.

That's some really nice art Graeme, I'll send you a PM.
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Hi Cliff,

That's a powerful story you posted there ("Jesus shows the Way"), some very strong feeling and thought in it. I love the visual non-sequiteur of the Dodo on panel 38, makes sense in the context of the story.

My guess is that this stuff's too heavyweight for Clint, but I have no access to the inside of Mr. Millar's head, so I might be wrong. Sleepless Phoenix are currently looking for scripts for their second anthology, I believe, you might want to pitch it to them? (http://thesleeplessp...1/gremlins.html) Again, I'm speaking as an outsider here, I don't know the phoenix people personally.

Anyway, thanks for writing this, for posting it, and best of luck with finding it a home.

Cheers,

Dave

PS: Have you seen the film "Delicatessen" - features cannibalism similar to in your story, but manages to be very funny and light-hearted at the same time. Very oddball film, worth a look.
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Thanks, its nice to get some feedback, especially positive. 'Jesus Shows the Way' I wrote back in 97, and think its one of my stronger pieces, people generally seem to like it, as its an interesting idea for a parrallel story and has strong emotion, I'm glad that came across. Since then I developed the idea further and pitched a 4 issue mini-series to Marvel for their Epic line, which they liked enough to send me a letter with positive feedback but said I wasn't quite there yet for them. That was another story set in the 'Jesus shows the Way' universe. But as Clint want 5 page submissions, I posted the original story which contains the seed of the idea. I'm hoping as the magazine contains both swearing and violence from Mr Millar that they would be open to all types of content. The longer story also contained black humour, which hopefully would have been right up his street, alas it wasn't to be.


The Dodo poses another problem, I believe on QI a while back they stated Man wiping out Dodos was a myth, wonder if I should look into that and attempt a rewrite or just leave it as it stands, relying on people accepting it, its an awkward one.

Oh and I have seen the film Delicatessen, I saw it when young and didn't think much of it, yet I love City of Lost Children and Amelie, but again wasn't overly impressed with MIcmacs. I wonder if I was too young for Delicatessen at the time or whether the film was just not for me.
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Thanks, its nice to get some feedback, especially positive. 'Jesus Shows the Way' I wrote back in 97, and think its one of my stronger pieces, people generally seem to like it, as its an interesting idea for a parrallel story and has strong emotion, I'm glad that came across. Since then I developed the idea further and pitched a 4 issue mini-series to Marvel for their Epic line, which they liked enough to send me a letter with positive feedback but said I wasn't quite there yet for them. That was another story set in the 'Jesus shows the Way' universe. But as Clint want 5 page submissions, I posted the original story which contains the seed of the idea. I'm hoping as the magazine contains both swearing and violence from Mr Millar that they would be open to all types of content. The longer story also contained black humour, which hopefully would have been right up his street, alas it wasn't to be.


The Dodo poses another problem, I believe on QI a while back they stated Man wiping out Dodos was a myth, wonder if I should look into that and attempt a rewrite or just leave it as it stands, relying on people accepting it, its an awkward one.

Oh and I have seen the film Delicatessen, I saw it when young and didn't think much of it, yet I love City of Lost Children and Amelie, but again wasn't overly impressed with MIcmacs. I wonder if I was too young for Delicatessen at the time or whether the film was just not for me.



well man did wipe out the dodos, but it was the introduction of rats from their ships that did it - they actually weren't good eating from the ships logs, but the rats found their nests easy pickings and basically ate all the eggs wiping them out.


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well man did wipe out the dodos, but it was the introduction of rats from their ships that did it - they actually weren't good eating from the ships logs, but the rats found their nests easy pickings and basically ate all the eggs wiping them out.



Thanks, that's the one. Realised I'm ok with my story anyway, because the book he is reviewing, like in Man in the High Castle, isn't actually of our world but very similar to, with subtle differences. This could be one of them! Print the Legend!

Hope I get an artist interested, I would like to think Millar would pick it if he liked the story, other than the 'magazine' pick it.



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If anyone wants a letterer then hook up with me!


Hey Hatiq, Graeme and myself are about four pages into a piece and we're looking for a letterer. Got any samples you could send our way?
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Hi there guys,
I'm interested in collaborating with someone on a comic, mainly to save me from the monotony of retail work.
I plan on taking a BA Hons degree in filmmaking, and my particular strength lies in screenwriting, so it'd be nice to transfer my skill-set to another medium.
My pitch is a relatively simple one; a club DJ finds himself in a world of trouble when a top music exec is brutally murdered at one of said DJ's infamous after-parties, and the DJ himself is framed for the killing. Now a fugitive, his situation is exacerbated by his swift, record-breaking rise to fame. The Dj is pursued across the globe by CIA agent "Johnson". Lots of gunfights (by way of the DJ's extensive "training" with GoldenEye 007), drug abuse and musical mayhem are bound to ensue, with tongue firmly in cheek all the while.
Any artists, letterers, colour-peeps, let me know if you're interested!
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Hi, people,

I'm a writer and I'm usually looking for artists to partner with. Rather than posting full scripts here, I prefer to get to know the artist's interests and likings before sending him a couple of synopses to choose. If any of you is willing, just PM me. If I find the art appealing (for whatever type of story it suits), I'm on it. I'm absolutely open as regards topics and style, providing that I find room for my own concerns, of course. You can find my previous work here: (http://blas-comics.blogspot.com/)

Cheers!
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Hello good people of Millar World. I hope I'm not too late to join this exciting party. I must admit that I'm new to this World; I recently bought issue 4 of CLiNT but I'm already hooked, I've ordered the back issues and the original Kick Ass.

My background is in script writing - not my day job, just a hobby - I have written sitcom scripts and short films, just to entertain myself really though also with the aim of becoming a better writer. I have had some minor success; I was one of the finalists in this year's End of the Pier international film festival in the best short film script category. I am also a big fan of stand up comedy, I have written a fair amount of material and also performed on several occasions. It was a love of stand up that actually introduced me to CLiNT as I had read that Stewart Lee had written for the most recent issue. Reading the magazine really inspired me to give it a go myself (I particularly enjoyed The Property and American Jesus), I now realise that there is the potential to be so much more creative in this format. If you are an artist then please take a look at my script Unexpected Guests. You can download the Word file here. This is a big departure from what I usually write as I usually think of how I can find humour in really mundane situations but as you will see I have tried something rather different here. I realise that the characters are a bit one dimensional but I think the dialogue is good and I know that Mark is looking for 4 or 5 page one off stories in the style of the twilight zone and it fits in with that. There is scope for an artist to be really creative in coming up with designs for the gothic sea women.

I have an idea for a whole series called Eddie Sellwood's Cursed Career. In a nutshell Eddie is a washed up ex-boy band member who has been forced into a menial job by the government who banned his group from performing and releasing records because some of their songs had revealed state secrets. He has no real talent or social skills but he wants to get back on stage. He appears at tiny clubs to play open spots where the crowd always think he's a character comedian and the women love him. So far I have written a synopsis and a five page sample story but it definitely has legs. If you'd like to see what I have written so far then let me know.

Thank you for your time.

Edited by Martyn Greenwood, 11 December 2010 - 10:58 PM.

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