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[Danos Filopoulos]

I am an amateur artist trying to get some practice at swquential storytelling.
This comic is my attempt at some social satire.
It is a two pager called Joy of Work and I would really like some useful criticism from anything you can imagine from pacing to style / technique and anything in between.
Supposedly it presents a dark humorous look at the office employees' work cycle in today's competitive society (...or something like that I guess).

My blog
http://danosart.blogspot.gr/

[Kavanagh]

Short, to the point and dark as fuck! Reminds of R. Crumb's stuff, in tone and style both. Really like it!

If I had a criticism to make, it'd be to do some speech bubbles because with all the SFX and such flying around, it's hard to differentiate between dialogue and SFX.

Other than that, a very dandy comic.

[Jim Ohara]

Oh I loved that. Super dark and twisted - I take it you're Greek? Wonderful work. Great characters and expressions - I wouldn't change a thing.

[JWCarroll]

Great stuff. I would echo the comment about the word balloons.

[Will Carper]

The only word "balloon" I had trouble with was the "get a job, ya bum" one. Would it not work in black? It was difficult to read for me, whereas all the others were very striking--I very much liked how they were stylized.

Otherwise, great work! As well as R. Crumb, the story gave me a Peter Kuper vibe, too.

Edited by Will Carper, 27 June 2012 - 05:24 PM.

[Geoffrey D. Wessel]

I dig it.

[Dean Schofield]

I feel your pain mate, belive me, nothing you do is good enough, employers assume all employees come with magical abilities and if they can get away with will have you performing the work of ten people five horses and an elephant, for peanuts when avalible.
Its good dude, wasn't quite sure what the eyes were all about at first, but other than that no complaints

[Danos Filopoulos]

Kvanagh, Jim, JW, Will, Geoff, Dean
Thank you all very much.
I really appreciate the comments and advice.

I am Greek as Jim guessed and I also work full time as an office employee while drawing on my free time. That would explain some of the sentiments depicted but the working conditions aren't that bad!

Dean described the reality of office life quite well also.
The eyes were supposedly used in place of pc monitors that are always watching you while you work instead of the worker watching them to give that 'big brother' feel. I tried to make the dialogue part of the art because speech bubbles felt a bit offputting but I see how they might also get lost as an effect.

No one does weird n funny better than Crumb and social commentary better than Kuper so thank you very much for the comparison. Personally I'm more of a fan of Crumb and the weird visuals of Terry Gilliam.

Again thank you all for your suggestions and kind remarks. Hopefully I'll be able to post more soon.

Cheers

Edited by Danos Filopoulos, 28 June 2012 - 01:45 PM.

[Dean Schofield]

Kvanagh, Jim, JW, Will, Geoff, Dean
Thank you all very much.
I really appreciate the comments and advice.

I am Greek as Jim guessed and I also work full time as an office employee while drawing on my free time. That would explain some of the sentiments depicted but the working conditions aren't that bad!

Dean described the reality of office life quite well also.
The eyes were supposedly used in place of pc monitors that are always watching you while you work instead of the worker watching them to give that 'big brother' feel. I tried to make the dialogue part of the art because speech bubbles felt a bit offputting but I see how they might also get lost as an effect.

No one does weird n funny better than Crumb and social commentary better than Kuper so thank you very much for the comparison. Personally I'm more of a fan of Crumb and the weird visuals of Terry Gilliam.

Again thank you all for your suggestions and kind remarks. Hopefully I'll be able to post more soon.

Cheers

Knew I was on the right train of thought with the eyes, I work as a Supervisor in a meat processing plant, that would provide good images. Glad I was some help, anytime dude, may call upon you sometime

Edited by Dean Schofield, 28 June 2012 - 04:07 PM.

[stuperrins]

dude, thats fuckin awesome stuff. lovely and dark

[Jimmy F]

Hey Danos, that is one dark filthy piece of work.

Made me feel like I needed a shower after reading it. Love it.

I have a short comic script here if you would be interested in reading it.

I think it would suit your style perfectly.

Let me know what you think.

[Danos Filopoulos]

Thaks alot Capt Midnight!
Feel free to pass it along by message or at damiadan@hotmail.com
I'd be interested to see what you have in mind.
Cheers!