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Sorry if this is out of line, but it might be worth one of the mods asking the Chief if the official word should come out that Space Oddities are no longer being accepted?
Since the last harvest of strips there has been no-one picked up (what was that, around 6-9 months ago?)
I'd really hate to see people putting a ton of effort into these strips only for them to languish in comic development hell.
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Hi all!
Hoping to find a colorist for my submission. I wrote a story and an awesome artist named Hoyt Silva did the pencils and inks (and letters). Now looking for a colorist to finish it up. Only 4 pages. Hope to hear from you. Thanks!
Drew
Hoping to find a colorist for my submission. I wrote a story and an awesome artist named Hoyt Silva did the pencils and inks (and letters). Now looking for a colorist to finish it up. Only 4 pages. Hope to hear from you. Thanks!
Drew
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Hi all!
Hoping to find a colorist for my submission. I wrote a story and an awesome artist named Hoyt Silva did the pencils and inks (and letters). Now looking for a colorist to finish it up. Only 4 pages. Hope to hear from you. Thanks!
Drew
Hi! mi name is Omar Casanova Im a freelance Illustrator, you can se some of my work here, http://casanonva130.deviantart.com/, im willing to give it a try, if you are interested.
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Posted 22 August 2011 - 01:29 PM
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Hi. This is my first post here (hoorah!). (In fact I hope I´m not doing the posting all wrong, I´ve never been on a forum before!)
I only recently discovered millarworld and the CLiNT space oddity thing, so I hope I´m not too late as some would imply!
Regardless I´ve written a 5 page story and like too many others I am looking for someone to illustrate it. Now, I know that there are a lot of really talented writers out there, so if nothing else, I would love to hear some comments on my script as this is one of the first I´ve finished!
Cheers! And keep up posting awesome stuff you guys! This site is a gold mine for anyone interested in creating comics!
The Script:
Cerberus
Page 1
Panel 1: We look at a middle aged man who is obviously a scientist. He looks at us, smiling. For future references, he´ll be called Albert.
Albert: SO, I GUESS I SHOULD EXPLAIN IT TO YOU, RIGHT?
Albert: HOW THIS WORKS?
Panel 2: We see a police commissioner walking up to Albert, shaking his hand.
Commissioner: I UNDERSTAND THE IMPORTANT PARTS, WHICH IS WHY I´M HERE. NEEDLESS TO SAY, ALBERT, THE GOVERNMENT HAS CERTAIN ISSUES WITH ERASING SOMEONE´S MIND…
Commissioner: … EVEN IF THAT SOMEONE IS JOHN NAP.
Panel 3: The two start to walk down a corridor.
Albert: OF COURSE… BUT WE HAVE SEVERAL SAFETY MEASURES IN PLACE. FOR INSTANCE: IF WE WISH TO UNDO THE MEMORY LOSS, WE SIMPLY HAVE TO SPEAK THE CODEWORD…
Commissioner: YES, I´VE BEEN INFORMED. QUITE FITTING CODEWORD I MUST SAY.
Albert: INDEED.
Panel 4: Albert guides the commissioner into a room where several surveillance monitors are lined up.
Albert: BUT CONSIDER THE APPLICATIONS OF THIS… VIOLENT PRISONERS AND MURDERERS, COMPLETELY REFORMED, MADE PERFECT IN THE ABSENCE OF THEIR TROUBLED PASTS.
Albert: THE MYTH OF MONSTERS BEING BORN, ONCE AND FOR ALL ABOLISHED.
Panel 5: The commissioner and Albert sit down in front of a screen. We see them from behind, so the screen is clearly visible. On it, a man in a lab coat is standing.
Commissioner: WELL I DON´T BUY INTO THAT HIPPIE BULL HICKEY…
Albert: WELL, LET´S WATCH MIKE TAKE MR. NAP THROUGH ONE OF US LITTLE EXPERIMENTS…
Albert: I THINK YOU´LL FIND THAT SEEING IS BELIEVING…
Screen: OK…
Page 2
Panel 1: we are introduced to the scientist. He is lean and wearing a lab coat. He looks nervous as he explains something.
The scientist: …SO, DID YOU CATCH THE GIST OF IT?
The scientist: BASICALLY WHAT WE DO HERE IS ERASE MINDS AND REBUILD THEM THROUGH A SERIES OF ARTIFICIAL MEMORIES AND REAL-LIFE SCENARIOS THE POINT IS…
Panel 2: We see who the scientist is talking to. It “the convict” who is one big, mean bastard that is wearing orange prison overalls and looks sort of like a shark that is just waiting to attack. Right now however, he is strapped to a chair that looks somewhat like a dentist´s chair, and is surrounded by high tech equipment with loads of wires that run around all over the place, two of the wires to straight up and onto his temples.
The convict: SAVE IT.
The convict: IT WAS THIS OR DEATH ROW…
The convict: …THE WAIT HERE WAS SHORTER.
Panel 3: The scientist moves in, inspecting the convict with cautious interest.
The scientist: YES… THEY DID WARN ME ABOUT YOUR ATTITUDE.
The scientist: HAVE YOU ALWAYS BEEN THIS ANGRY?
The convict: THIS A PART OF YOUR EXPERIMENT?
Panel 4: Close up of the scientist, looks like he´s struggling to relay something, as if it must be considered carefully.
Quyosh: WELL… PARTIALLY… IT´S GOOD TO KNOW IF…
Panel 5: A close up of Nap he looks frustrated and impatient.
The convict: JEEZ… IS THE POINT OF THE EXPERIMENT THE TALK ME TO DEATH? GET ON WITH IT!
Panel 6: the scientist snaps out of it and starts to check the wires that run onto Nap´s head.
The scientist: OH, I DIGRESS… IT´S NOT REALLY MY PLACE TO ASK, BUT HOW OFTEN DO YOU GET A CHANCE TO TALK TO A KILLER WHO´LL SOON HAVE ALL MEMORY ERASED…
The scientist: RIGHT: WE´RE QUITE READY. NOW, THE POINT IS TO ERASE THE PARTS OF YOU MEMORY THAT MAKES YOU SO ANGRY THAT YOU NEED TO KILL.
The convict: HA! I THINK I SHOULD ANSWER THAT QUESTION OF YOUR´S AND SAVE YOU SOME TIME… I WAS BORN THIS WAY
Page 3
Panel 1: the scientist is in front of the convict, fine tuning something on a machine.
The scientist: NONESENSE. NOBODY IS BORN EVIL. NOW… SINCE THIS IS EXPERIMENTAL, WE´LL LEAVE A BUILT IN CODEWORD, THAT´LL UNLOCK THE FORGOTTEN MEMORIES…
Panel 2: A close up of the scientist, he is looking at a clipboard, reading something, casually.
The scientist: YOUR´S SHALL BE…
SOUND F/X: SNAP!
Panel 3: A close up of Nap´s right hand as it breaks free of the restraints.
The scientist: GRAAAHH!!
Panel 4 (largest on page): The scientist steps back in horror, stunned as the convict breaks free of the final restraints.
The scientist: OH CRAP… SECURITY!
The convict: THEY CAN´T HEAR YOU. NOW…
The convict: …I´LL SHOW YOU SOMETHING TO REMEMBER ´TILL THE END OF YOUR DAYS!
Panel 5: The scientist runs away screaming, the convict hot at his heels.
Page 4
Panel 1: The scientist runs into an office, slapping the door behind him.
The scientist: OH NO OH NO OH NO!
Panel 2: the scientist locks the door.
SOUND F/X: CLICK!
Panel 3: The scientist presses himself up against the door, face filled with terror.
The convict (through the door): I´LL GET IN… YOU CAN´T KEEP ME OUT!
Panel 4: The scientist runs to a desk in the room, on the desk there is a red button that reads “security”.
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T LET THIS BE REAL!
Panel 5: Close up of The scientist pressing the red button.
SOUND F/X: FZZZ FZZZ FZZZ
Panel 6: Close up of the scientist´s face, he is close to tears.
The scientist: WHY DOESN´T IT WORK!
Panel 7: the scientist crawls under the desk, trying to hide.
Panel 8: The same image as before. The convict´s legs now stand in front of the desk, letting us know that he has seen the scientist.
The scientist: OH NO…
Page 5
Panel 1: The scientist holds his hands up in front of himself as if trying to protect himself.
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T KILL ME!
Panel 2: a pair of cuffs are strapped to the scientist´s wrists. The scientist looks confused.
The scientist: HUH?
Panel 3: A close up of the convict, who smiles.
The convict: MR: NAP…
The convict: CERBERUS
Panel 4: a close up of Mr. Nap as he is all of a sudden transformed into a furious beast. Screaming and shouting.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU BASTARDS! YOU STOLE THEM, ALL MY PRECIOUS KILLS! MY MEMORIES! MADE ME YOUR SLAVE, I´LL KILL YOU!
Panel 5: “The convict” drags Mr. Nap away as Mr. Nap still screams and shouts. “The convict speaks into his wrist (a two-way).
The convict: TEST CONCLUDED.
Albert (through “the convict´s ear piece): GOOD WORK, MIKE.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU STOLE IT ALL! I´LL KILL YOU.
Panel 6: We are in a dark room watching the convict drag Mr. Nap away on the screen. Albert and the commissioner are watching it.
Commissioner: MY GOD, ALBERT! YOU REALLY DID IT!
Commissioner: YOU REALLY CAN DOMESTICATE KILLERS!
Panel 7: We see Albert, looking at us smiling.
Albert: I DIDN´T I TELL YOU, SEEING IS BELIEVING.
Hi. This is my first post here (hoorah!).
I only recently discovered millarworld and the CLiNT space oddity thing, so I hope I´m not too late as some would imply!
Regardless I´ve written a 5 page story and like too many others I am looking for someone to illustrate it. Now, I know that there are a lot of really talented writers out there, so if nothing else, I would love to hear some comments on my script as this is one of the first I´ve finished!
Cheers! And keep up posting awesome stuff you guys! This site is a gold mine for anyone interested in creating comics!
The Script:
Cerberus
Page 1
Panel 1: We look at a middle aged man who is obviously a scientist. He looks at us, smiling. For future references, he´ll be called Albert.
Albert: SO, I GUESS I SHOULD EXPLAIN IT TO YOU, RIGHT?
Albert: HOW THIS WORKS?
Panel 2: We see a police commissioner walking up to Albert, shaking his hand.
Commissioner: I UNDERSTAND THE IMPORTANT PARTS, WHICH IS WHY I´M HERE. NEEDLESS TO SAY, ALBERT, THE GOVERNMENT HAS CERTAIN ISSUES WITH ERASING SOMEONE´S MIND…
Commissioner: … EVEN IF THAT SOMEONE IS JOHN NAP.
Panel 3: The two start to walk down a corridor.
Albert: OF COURSE… BUT WE HAVE SEVERAL SAFETY MEASURES IN PLACE. FOR INSTANCE: IF WE WISH TO UNDO THE MEMORY LOSS, WE SIMPLY HAVE TO SPEAK THE CODEWORD…
Commissioner: YES, I´VE BEEN INFORMED. QUITE FITTING CODEWORD I MUST SAY.
Albert: INDEED.
Panel 4: Albert guides the commissioner into a room where several surveillance monitors are lined up.
Albert: BUT CONSIDER THE APPLICATIONS OF THIS… VIOLENT PRISONERS AND MURDERERS, COMPLETELY REFORMED, MADE PERFECT IN THE ABSENCE OF THEIR TROUBLED PASTS.
Albert: THE MYTH OF MONSTERS BEING BORN, ONCE AND FOR ALL ABOLISHED.
Panel 5: The commissioner and Albert sit down in front of a screen. We see them from behind, so the screen is clearly visible. On it, a man in a lab coat is standing.
Commissioner: WELL I DON´T BUY INTO THAT HIPPIE BULL HICKEY…
Albert: WELL, LET´S WATCH MIKE TAKE MR. NAP THROUGH ONE OF US LITTLE EXPERIMENTS…
Albert: I THINK YOU´LL FIND THAT SEEING IS BELIEVING…
Screen: OK…
Page 2
Panel 1: we are introduced to the scientist. He is lean and wearing a lab coat. He looks nervous as he explains something.
The scientist: …SO, DID YOU CATCH THE GIST OF IT?
The scientist: BASICALLY WHAT WE DO HERE IS ERASE MINDS AND REBUILD THEM THROUGH A SERIES OF ARTIFICIAL MEMORIES AND REAL-LIFE SCENARIOS THE POINT IS…
Panel 2: We see who the scientist is talking to. It "the convict" who is one big, mean bastard that is wearing orange prison overalls and looks sort of like a shark that is just waiting to attack. Right now however, he is strapped to a chair that looks somewhat like a dentist´s chair, and is surrounded by high tech equipment with loads of wires that run around all over the place, two of the wires to straight up and onto his temples.
The convict: SAVE IT.
The convict: IT WAS THIS OR DEATH ROW…
The convict: …THE WAIT HERE WAS SHORTER.
Panel 3: The scientist moves in, inspecting the convict with cautious interest.
The scientist: YES… THEY DID WARN ME ABOUT YOUR ATTITUDE.
The scientist: HAVE YOU ALWAYS BEEN THIS ANGRY?
The convict: THIS A PART OF YOUR EXPERIMENT?
Panel 4: Close up of the scientist, looks like he´s struggling to relay something, as if it must be considered carefully.
Quyosh: WELL… PARTIALLY… IT´S GOOD TO KNOW IF…
Panel 5: A close up of Nap he looks frustrated and impatient.
The convict: JEEZ… IS THE POINT OF THE EXPERIMENT THE TALK ME TO DEATH? GET ON WITH IT!
Panel 6: the scientist snaps out of it and starts to check the wires that run onto Nap´s head.
The scientist: OH, I DIGRESS… IT´S NOT REALLY MY PLACE TO ASK, BUT HOW OFTEN DO YOU GET A CHANCE TO TALK TO A KILLER WHO´LL SOON HAVE ALL MEMORY ERASED…
The scientist: RIGHT: WE´RE QUITE READY. NOW, THE POINT IS TO ERASE THE PARTS OF YOU MEMORY THAT MAKES YOU SO ANGRY THAT YOU NEED TO KILL.
The convict: HA! I THINK I SHOULD ANSWER THAT QUESTION OF YOUR´S AND SAVE YOU SOME TIME… I WAS BORN THIS WAY
Page 3
Panel 1: the scientist is in front of the convict, fine tuning something on a machine.
The scientist: NONESENSE. NOBODY IS BORN EVIL. NOW… SINCE THIS IS EXPERIMENTAL, WE´LL LEAVE A BUILT IN CODEWORD, THAT´LL UNLOCK THE FORGOTTEN MEMORIES…
Panel 2: A close up of the scientist, he is looking at a clipboard, reading something, casually.
The scientist: YOUR´S SHALL BE…
SOUND F/X: SNAP!
Panel 3: A close up of Nap´s right hand as it breaks free of the restraints.
The scientist: GRAAAHH!!
Panel 4 (largest on page): The scientist steps back in horror, stunned as the convict breaks free of the final restraints.
The scientist: OH CRAP… SECURITY!
The convict: THEY CAN´T HEAR YOU. NOW…
The convict: …I´LL SHOW YOU SOMETHING TO REMEMBER ´TILL THE END OF YOUR DAYS!
Panel 5: The scientist runs away screaming, the convict hot at his heels.
Page 4
Panel 1: The scientist runs into an office, slapping the door behind him.
The scientist: OH NO OH NO OH NO!
Panel 2: the scientist locks the door.
SOUND F/X: CLICK!
Panel 3: The scientist presses himself up against the door, face filled with terror.
The convict (through the door): I´LL GET IN… YOU CAN´T KEEP ME OUT!
Panel 4: The scientist runs to a desk in the room, on the desk there is a red button that reads "security".
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T LET THIS BE REAL!
Panel 5: Close up of The scientist pressing the red button.
SOUND F/X: FZZZ FZZZ FZZZ
Panel 6: Close up of the scientist´s face, he is close to tears.
The scientist: WHY DOESN´T IT WORK!
Panel 7: the scientist crawls under the desk, trying to hide.
Panel 8: The same image as before. The convict´s legs now stand in front of the desk, letting us know that he has seen the scientist.
The scientist: OH NO…
Page 5
Panel 1: The scientist holds his hands up in front of himself as if trying to protect himself.
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T KILL ME!
Panel 2: a pair of cuffs are strapped to the scientist´s wrists. The scientist looks confused.
The scientist: HUH?
Panel 3: A close up of the convict, who smiles.
The convict: MR: NAP…
The convict: CERBERUS
Panel 4: a close up of Mr. Nap as he is all of a sudden transformed into a furious beast. Screaming and shouting.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU BASTARDS! YOU STOLE THEM, ALL MY PRECIOUS KILLS! MY MEMORIES! MADE ME YOUR SLAVE, I´LL KILL YOU!
Panel 5: "The convict" drags Mr. Nap away as Mr. Nap still screams and shouts. "The convict speaks into his wrist (a two-way).
The convict: TEST CONCLUDED.
Albert (through "the convict´s ear piece): GOOD WORK, MIKE.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU STOLE IT ALL! I´LL KILL YOU.
Panel 6: We are in a dark room watching the convict drag Mr. Nap away on the screen. Albert and the commissioner are watching it.
Commissioner: MY GOD, ALBERT! YOU REALLY DID IT!
Commissioner: YOU REALLY CAN DOMESTICATE KILLERS!
Panel 7: We see Albert, looking at us smiling.
Albert: I DIDN´T I TELL YOU, SEEING IS BELIEVING.
I only recently discovered millarworld and the CLiNT space oddity thing, so I hope I´m not too late as some would imply!
Regardless I´ve written a 5 page story and like too many others I am looking for someone to illustrate it. Now, I know that there are a lot of really talented writers out there, so if nothing else, I would love to hear some comments on my script as this is one of the first I´ve finished!
Cheers! And keep up posting awesome stuff you guys! This site is a gold mine for anyone interested in creating comics!
The Script:
Cerberus
Page 1
Panel 1: We look at a middle aged man who is obviously a scientist. He looks at us, smiling. For future references, he´ll be called Albert.
Albert: SO, I GUESS I SHOULD EXPLAIN IT TO YOU, RIGHT?
Albert: HOW THIS WORKS?
Panel 2: We see a police commissioner walking up to Albert, shaking his hand.
Commissioner: I UNDERSTAND THE IMPORTANT PARTS, WHICH IS WHY I´M HERE. NEEDLESS TO SAY, ALBERT, THE GOVERNMENT HAS CERTAIN ISSUES WITH ERASING SOMEONE´S MIND…
Commissioner: … EVEN IF THAT SOMEONE IS JOHN NAP.
Panel 3: The two start to walk down a corridor.
Albert: OF COURSE… BUT WE HAVE SEVERAL SAFETY MEASURES IN PLACE. FOR INSTANCE: IF WE WISH TO UNDO THE MEMORY LOSS, WE SIMPLY HAVE TO SPEAK THE CODEWORD…
Commissioner: YES, I´VE BEEN INFORMED. QUITE FITTING CODEWORD I MUST SAY.
Albert: INDEED.
Panel 4: Albert guides the commissioner into a room where several surveillance monitors are lined up.
Albert: BUT CONSIDER THE APPLICATIONS OF THIS… VIOLENT PRISONERS AND MURDERERS, COMPLETELY REFORMED, MADE PERFECT IN THE ABSENCE OF THEIR TROUBLED PASTS.
Albert: THE MYTH OF MONSTERS BEING BORN, ONCE AND FOR ALL ABOLISHED.
Panel 5: The commissioner and Albert sit down in front of a screen. We see them from behind, so the screen is clearly visible. On it, a man in a lab coat is standing.
Commissioner: WELL I DON´T BUY INTO THAT HIPPIE BULL HICKEY…
Albert: WELL, LET´S WATCH MIKE TAKE MR. NAP THROUGH ONE OF US LITTLE EXPERIMENTS…
Albert: I THINK YOU´LL FIND THAT SEEING IS BELIEVING…
Screen: OK…
Page 2
Panel 1: we are introduced to the scientist. He is lean and wearing a lab coat. He looks nervous as he explains something.
The scientist: …SO, DID YOU CATCH THE GIST OF IT?
The scientist: BASICALLY WHAT WE DO HERE IS ERASE MINDS AND REBUILD THEM THROUGH A SERIES OF ARTIFICIAL MEMORIES AND REAL-LIFE SCENARIOS THE POINT IS…
Panel 2: We see who the scientist is talking to. It “the convict” who is one big, mean bastard that is wearing orange prison overalls and looks sort of like a shark that is just waiting to attack. Right now however, he is strapped to a chair that looks somewhat like a dentist´s chair, and is surrounded by high tech equipment with loads of wires that run around all over the place, two of the wires to straight up and onto his temples.
The convict: SAVE IT.
The convict: IT WAS THIS OR DEATH ROW…
The convict: …THE WAIT HERE WAS SHORTER.
Panel 3: The scientist moves in, inspecting the convict with cautious interest.
The scientist: YES… THEY DID WARN ME ABOUT YOUR ATTITUDE.
The scientist: HAVE YOU ALWAYS BEEN THIS ANGRY?
The convict: THIS A PART OF YOUR EXPERIMENT?
Panel 4: Close up of the scientist, looks like he´s struggling to relay something, as if it must be considered carefully.
Quyosh: WELL… PARTIALLY… IT´S GOOD TO KNOW IF…
Panel 5: A close up of Nap he looks frustrated and impatient.
The convict: JEEZ… IS THE POINT OF THE EXPERIMENT THE TALK ME TO DEATH? GET ON WITH IT!
Panel 6: the scientist snaps out of it and starts to check the wires that run onto Nap´s head.
The scientist: OH, I DIGRESS… IT´S NOT REALLY MY PLACE TO ASK, BUT HOW OFTEN DO YOU GET A CHANCE TO TALK TO A KILLER WHO´LL SOON HAVE ALL MEMORY ERASED…
The scientist: RIGHT: WE´RE QUITE READY. NOW, THE POINT IS TO ERASE THE PARTS OF YOU MEMORY THAT MAKES YOU SO ANGRY THAT YOU NEED TO KILL.
The convict: HA! I THINK I SHOULD ANSWER THAT QUESTION OF YOUR´S AND SAVE YOU SOME TIME… I WAS BORN THIS WAY
Page 3
Panel 1: the scientist is in front of the convict, fine tuning something on a machine.
The scientist: NONESENSE. NOBODY IS BORN EVIL. NOW… SINCE THIS IS EXPERIMENTAL, WE´LL LEAVE A BUILT IN CODEWORD, THAT´LL UNLOCK THE FORGOTTEN MEMORIES…
Panel 2: A close up of the scientist, he is looking at a clipboard, reading something, casually.
The scientist: YOUR´S SHALL BE…
SOUND F/X: SNAP!
Panel 3: A close up of Nap´s right hand as it breaks free of the restraints.
The scientist: GRAAAHH!!
Panel 4 (largest on page): The scientist steps back in horror, stunned as the convict breaks free of the final restraints.
The scientist: OH CRAP… SECURITY!
The convict: THEY CAN´T HEAR YOU. NOW…
The convict: …I´LL SHOW YOU SOMETHING TO REMEMBER ´TILL THE END OF YOUR DAYS!
Panel 5: The scientist runs away screaming, the convict hot at his heels.
Page 4
Panel 1: The scientist runs into an office, slapping the door behind him.
The scientist: OH NO OH NO OH NO!
Panel 2: the scientist locks the door.
SOUND F/X: CLICK!
Panel 3: The scientist presses himself up against the door, face filled with terror.
The convict (through the door): I´LL GET IN… YOU CAN´T KEEP ME OUT!
Panel 4: The scientist runs to a desk in the room, on the desk there is a red button that reads “security”.
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T LET THIS BE REAL!
Panel 5: Close up of The scientist pressing the red button.
SOUND F/X: FZZZ FZZZ FZZZ
Panel 6: Close up of the scientist´s face, he is close to tears.
The scientist: WHY DOESN´T IT WORK!
Panel 7: the scientist crawls under the desk, trying to hide.
Panel 8: The same image as before. The convict´s legs now stand in front of the desk, letting us know that he has seen the scientist.
The scientist: OH NO…
Page 5
Panel 1: The scientist holds his hands up in front of himself as if trying to protect himself.
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T KILL ME!
Panel 2: a pair of cuffs are strapped to the scientist´s wrists. The scientist looks confused.
The scientist: HUH?
Panel 3: A close up of the convict, who smiles.
The convict: MR: NAP…
The convict: CERBERUS
Panel 4: a close up of Mr. Nap as he is all of a sudden transformed into a furious beast. Screaming and shouting.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU BASTARDS! YOU STOLE THEM, ALL MY PRECIOUS KILLS! MY MEMORIES! MADE ME YOUR SLAVE, I´LL KILL YOU!
Panel 5: “The convict” drags Mr. Nap away as Mr. Nap still screams and shouts. “The convict speaks into his wrist (a two-way).
The convict: TEST CONCLUDED.
Albert (through “the convict´s ear piece): GOOD WORK, MIKE.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU STOLE IT ALL! I´LL KILL YOU.
Panel 6: We are in a dark room watching the convict drag Mr. Nap away on the screen. Albert and the commissioner are watching it.
Commissioner: MY GOD, ALBERT! YOU REALLY DID IT!
Commissioner: YOU REALLY CAN DOMESTICATE KILLERS!
Panel 7: We see Albert, looking at us smiling.
Albert: I DIDN´T I TELL YOU, SEEING IS BELIEVING.
Hi. This is my first post here (hoorah!).
I only recently discovered millarworld and the CLiNT space oddity thing, so I hope I´m not too late as some would imply!
Regardless I´ve written a 5 page story and like too many others I am looking for someone to illustrate it. Now, I know that there are a lot of really talented writers out there, so if nothing else, I would love to hear some comments on my script as this is one of the first I´ve finished!
Cheers! And keep up posting awesome stuff you guys! This site is a gold mine for anyone interested in creating comics!
The Script:
Cerberus
Page 1
Panel 1: We look at a middle aged man who is obviously a scientist. He looks at us, smiling. For future references, he´ll be called Albert.
Albert: SO, I GUESS I SHOULD EXPLAIN IT TO YOU, RIGHT?
Albert: HOW THIS WORKS?
Panel 2: We see a police commissioner walking up to Albert, shaking his hand.
Commissioner: I UNDERSTAND THE IMPORTANT PARTS, WHICH IS WHY I´M HERE. NEEDLESS TO SAY, ALBERT, THE GOVERNMENT HAS CERTAIN ISSUES WITH ERASING SOMEONE´S MIND…
Commissioner: … EVEN IF THAT SOMEONE IS JOHN NAP.
Panel 3: The two start to walk down a corridor.
Albert: OF COURSE… BUT WE HAVE SEVERAL SAFETY MEASURES IN PLACE. FOR INSTANCE: IF WE WISH TO UNDO THE MEMORY LOSS, WE SIMPLY HAVE TO SPEAK THE CODEWORD…
Commissioner: YES, I´VE BEEN INFORMED. QUITE FITTING CODEWORD I MUST SAY.
Albert: INDEED.
Panel 4: Albert guides the commissioner into a room where several surveillance monitors are lined up.
Albert: BUT CONSIDER THE APPLICATIONS OF THIS… VIOLENT PRISONERS AND MURDERERS, COMPLETELY REFORMED, MADE PERFECT IN THE ABSENCE OF THEIR TROUBLED PASTS.
Albert: THE MYTH OF MONSTERS BEING BORN, ONCE AND FOR ALL ABOLISHED.
Panel 5: The commissioner and Albert sit down in front of a screen. We see them from behind, so the screen is clearly visible. On it, a man in a lab coat is standing.
Commissioner: WELL I DON´T BUY INTO THAT HIPPIE BULL HICKEY…
Albert: WELL, LET´S WATCH MIKE TAKE MR. NAP THROUGH ONE OF US LITTLE EXPERIMENTS…
Albert: I THINK YOU´LL FIND THAT SEEING IS BELIEVING…
Screen: OK…
Page 2
Panel 1: we are introduced to the scientist. He is lean and wearing a lab coat. He looks nervous as he explains something.
The scientist: …SO, DID YOU CATCH THE GIST OF IT?
The scientist: BASICALLY WHAT WE DO HERE IS ERASE MINDS AND REBUILD THEM THROUGH A SERIES OF ARTIFICIAL MEMORIES AND REAL-LIFE SCENARIOS THE POINT IS…
Panel 2: We see who the scientist is talking to. It "the convict" who is one big, mean bastard that is wearing orange prison overalls and looks sort of like a shark that is just waiting to attack. Right now however, he is strapped to a chair that looks somewhat like a dentist´s chair, and is surrounded by high tech equipment with loads of wires that run around all over the place, two of the wires to straight up and onto his temples.
The convict: SAVE IT.
The convict: IT WAS THIS OR DEATH ROW…
The convict: …THE WAIT HERE WAS SHORTER.
Panel 3: The scientist moves in, inspecting the convict with cautious interest.
The scientist: YES… THEY DID WARN ME ABOUT YOUR ATTITUDE.
The scientist: HAVE YOU ALWAYS BEEN THIS ANGRY?
The convict: THIS A PART OF YOUR EXPERIMENT?
Panel 4: Close up of the scientist, looks like he´s struggling to relay something, as if it must be considered carefully.
Quyosh: WELL… PARTIALLY… IT´S GOOD TO KNOW IF…
Panel 5: A close up of Nap he looks frustrated and impatient.
The convict: JEEZ… IS THE POINT OF THE EXPERIMENT THE TALK ME TO DEATH? GET ON WITH IT!
Panel 6: the scientist snaps out of it and starts to check the wires that run onto Nap´s head.
The scientist: OH, I DIGRESS… IT´S NOT REALLY MY PLACE TO ASK, BUT HOW OFTEN DO YOU GET A CHANCE TO TALK TO A KILLER WHO´LL SOON HAVE ALL MEMORY ERASED…
The scientist: RIGHT: WE´RE QUITE READY. NOW, THE POINT IS TO ERASE THE PARTS OF YOU MEMORY THAT MAKES YOU SO ANGRY THAT YOU NEED TO KILL.
The convict: HA! I THINK I SHOULD ANSWER THAT QUESTION OF YOUR´S AND SAVE YOU SOME TIME… I WAS BORN THIS WAY
Page 3
Panel 1: the scientist is in front of the convict, fine tuning something on a machine.
The scientist: NONESENSE. NOBODY IS BORN EVIL. NOW… SINCE THIS IS EXPERIMENTAL, WE´LL LEAVE A BUILT IN CODEWORD, THAT´LL UNLOCK THE FORGOTTEN MEMORIES…
Panel 2: A close up of the scientist, he is looking at a clipboard, reading something, casually.
The scientist: YOUR´S SHALL BE…
SOUND F/X: SNAP!
Panel 3: A close up of Nap´s right hand as it breaks free of the restraints.
The scientist: GRAAAHH!!
Panel 4 (largest on page): The scientist steps back in horror, stunned as the convict breaks free of the final restraints.
The scientist: OH CRAP… SECURITY!
The convict: THEY CAN´T HEAR YOU. NOW…
The convict: …I´LL SHOW YOU SOMETHING TO REMEMBER ´TILL THE END OF YOUR DAYS!
Panel 5: The scientist runs away screaming, the convict hot at his heels.
Page 4
Panel 1: The scientist runs into an office, slapping the door behind him.
The scientist: OH NO OH NO OH NO!
Panel 2: the scientist locks the door.
SOUND F/X: CLICK!
Panel 3: The scientist presses himself up against the door, face filled with terror.
The convict (through the door): I´LL GET IN… YOU CAN´T KEEP ME OUT!
Panel 4: The scientist runs to a desk in the room, on the desk there is a red button that reads "security".
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T LET THIS BE REAL!
Panel 5: Close up of The scientist pressing the red button.
SOUND F/X: FZZZ FZZZ FZZZ
Panel 6: Close up of the scientist´s face, he is close to tears.
The scientist: WHY DOESN´T IT WORK!
Panel 7: the scientist crawls under the desk, trying to hide.
Panel 8: The same image as before. The convict´s legs now stand in front of the desk, letting us know that he has seen the scientist.
The scientist: OH NO…
Page 5
Panel 1: The scientist holds his hands up in front of himself as if trying to protect himself.
The scientist: PLEASE DON´T KILL ME!
Panel 2: a pair of cuffs are strapped to the scientist´s wrists. The scientist looks confused.
The scientist: HUH?
Panel 3: A close up of the convict, who smiles.
The convict: MR: NAP…
The convict: CERBERUS
Panel 4: a close up of Mr. Nap as he is all of a sudden transformed into a furious beast. Screaming and shouting.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU BASTARDS! YOU STOLE THEM, ALL MY PRECIOUS KILLS! MY MEMORIES! MADE ME YOUR SLAVE, I´LL KILL YOU!
Panel 5: "The convict" drags Mr. Nap away as Mr. Nap still screams and shouts. "The convict speaks into his wrist (a two-way).
The convict: TEST CONCLUDED.
Albert (through "the convict´s ear piece): GOOD WORK, MIKE.
Mr. Nap (the scientist): YOU STOLE IT ALL! I´LL KILL YOU.
Panel 6: We are in a dark room watching the convict drag Mr. Nap away on the screen. Albert and the commissioner are watching it.
Commissioner: MY GOD, ALBERT! YOU REALLY DID IT!
Commissioner: YOU REALLY CAN DOMESTICATE KILLERS!
Panel 7: We see Albert, looking at us smiling.
Albert: I DIDN´T I TELL YOU, SEEING IS BELIEVING.
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Posted 13 September 2011 - 01:55 PM
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Hi guys, there's a lot of cool ideas on here! I have a few scripts on the go at the moment but if any writers like my artwork then please get in touch. I'd like to pencil some short scripts (no more than 5 pages preferably) just to get my art moving around out there. You can see some of my work here:
http://rayfavourite.tumblr.com
If you wanna team up please give me a shout but please also understand I have a few commitments to take care of first!
Thanks guys!
Ray Favourite
http://rayfavourite.tumblr.com
If you wanna team up please give me a shout but please also understand I have a few commitments to take care of first!
Thanks guys!
Ray Favourite
#106
Posted 15 September 2011 - 04:25 PM
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Hi guys, there's a lot of cool ideas on here! I have a few scripts on the go at the moment but if any writers like my artwork then please get in touch. I'd like to pencil some short scripts (no more than 5 pages preferably) just to get my art moving around out there. You can see some of my work here:
http://rayfavourite.tumblr.com
If you wanna team up please give me a shout but please also understand I have a few commitments to take care of first!
Thanks guys!
Ray Favourite
Hey Ray. If just PM me your email I can send you some shorts to have a look at. Or you could look at the scripts in the link in my signature. But it's a bit cluttered.
Cheers.
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Posted 22 September 2011 - 06:29 PM
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[Sorry for the the missing spaces, for some reason the formatting has went amiss.]
Hello,
I amlooking for an artist to collaborate with on a story. I currently have a five page script that Ihave been working on for quite some time (I originally wrote the story as anovel, but after countless redrafts I fell it suits graphics better than writing)so breaking the action up in to panels, along with adjusting pace, dialog andmaking changes has taken some time. I have made more changes to it in thosefive pages than I have in four redrafts.
The Basic Premise of the story is as follows: It follows thestory of the 'Archetype' a biological super-solider who was crafted by theruling body of earth known as the Conclave of Twilight. The story starts withhim fleeing through the city from the Enforcers (The Conclave of TwilightsMilitary Police). Finally getting caughtand being recused by the Sanctum of Harmony. That is basically that the five pages cover. But after that the story goeson to tell of him unlocking his 'powers', exploring the 'blind world' below andthe barren one above. It also explores the strange three way war between theConclave of Twilight, The Sanctum of Harmony and the Hand of Dawn. The storyrevolves around the Conclave of Twilights oppression of humanity, and humanitiesignorance to that oppression. There aremany more layers to this story that I wish I could talk to you about, but Iwould be here for pages and pages and I don't want to give away all my secrets!
I think a line I used in the original draft sums up the Conclavescontrol:
'You do not see what they do not want seen. You cannot hear,what they do not want heard. Nothing exists, unless they want it to exist.'
I will provide the script below, however I want to coversome points first some things first.
čThis is the first time I have ever panelled somethingup; if an artist dose come forward I will be very (very in the sense of nigh on begging) open to their creative inputon the structure, layout and almost any aspect of it.
čThe Creative freedom here is pretty muchlimitless, I have 'general styles' in my head that I will convey, but afterthat… its very much up to the artist to take my world and make it their own.
čAlthough it's only this is a short collaboration.I am very spiritually invested in this story. I'd love to draw an artist in tothat as well.
Notes of Style – Conclave of Twilight and Enforcerssignature colour is Purple. Hand of Dawn is Black and Sanctum of Harmony useRed and Blue.
The Era this is set is very 'futuristic' all the armour I imagineas high-tech battle suits, with hints of older styles. The Enforcers inparticular have a 'Templars' feel to their armour.
The architecture ofthe era is also very new age. But any particular 'style' is up to the artist,
Other Notes on the script –
The 'Shining Citadel' referred to is a huge flying cityknown as Eden from witch the Conclave Govern
The Story starts is City Sixteen, All cities are 'underground'although the populace do not 'know this' the rain mention is artificial. (Thereasons for all this are explained later, but as I stated above. If I was toexplain everything. I would be here for pages.
Page One
Page Three
Page Four
Being restrainedby two Enforcers
Enforcers1# - 'Got you!'
Enforcer2#- 'This Omega Team to Legion, We have him.'
Over radio – 'Stay put Omega steam, Support isinbound.'
Inthe distance the women in is walking up the street.
Page Five
S Palmer.
Contact Information:
Email;Stewart[dot]Palmer[at]gmail.com
Skype: ThaneFein
Hello,
I amlooking for an artist to collaborate with on a story. I currently have a five page script that Ihave been working on for quite some time (I originally wrote the story as anovel, but after countless redrafts I fell it suits graphics better than writing)so breaking the action up in to panels, along with adjusting pace, dialog andmaking changes has taken some time. I have made more changes to it in thosefive pages than I have in four redrafts.
The Basic Premise of the story is as follows: It follows thestory of the 'Archetype' a biological super-solider who was crafted by theruling body of earth known as the Conclave of Twilight. The story starts withhim fleeing through the city from the Enforcers (The Conclave of TwilightsMilitary Police). Finally getting caughtand being recused by the Sanctum of Harmony. That is basically that the five pages cover. But after that the story goeson to tell of him unlocking his 'powers', exploring the 'blind world' below andthe barren one above. It also explores the strange three way war between theConclave of Twilight, The Sanctum of Harmony and the Hand of Dawn. The storyrevolves around the Conclave of Twilights oppression of humanity, and humanitiesignorance to that oppression. There aremany more layers to this story that I wish I could talk to you about, but Iwould be here for pages and pages and I don't want to give away all my secrets!
I think a line I used in the original draft sums up the Conclavescontrol:
'You do not see what they do not want seen. You cannot hear,what they do not want heard. Nothing exists, unless they want it to exist.'
I will provide the script below, however I want to coversome points first some things first.
čThis is the first time I have ever panelled somethingup; if an artist dose come forward I will be very (very in the sense of nigh on begging) open to their creative inputon the structure, layout and almost any aspect of it.
čThe Creative freedom here is pretty muchlimitless, I have 'general styles' in my head that I will convey, but afterthat… its very much up to the artist to take my world and make it their own.
čAlthough it's only this is a short collaboration.I am very spiritually invested in this story. I'd love to draw an artist in tothat as well.
Notes of Style – Conclave of Twilight and Enforcerssignature colour is Purple. Hand of Dawn is Black and Sanctum of Harmony useRed and Blue.
The Era this is set is very 'futuristic' all the armour I imagineas high-tech battle suits, with hints of older styles. The Enforcers inparticular have a 'Templars' feel to their armour.
The architecture ofthe era is also very new age. But any particular 'style' is up to the artist,
Other Notes on the script –
The 'Shining Citadel' referred to is a huge flying cityknown as Eden from witch the Conclave Govern
The Story starts is City Sixteen, All cities are 'underground'although the populace do not 'know this' the rain mention is artificial. (Thereasons for all this are explained later, but as I stated above. If I was toexplain everything. I would be here for pages.
Page One
Panel One – 'In the year 2052, we were tried by fire.'
Images of a holocaustic war.
Panel Two – 'In 2066, the Conclave of Twilight took control'[1]
Background: The shining citadel ofthe Conclave above picturesque landscape, Foreground: the shadow figures of theConclave, face hidden and hooded.
Panel Three – 'In 2071, the world forgot its origins'
Images of piles Burnt Books, Lostinformation and destroyed history, anything that connotes destruction ofculture, heritage and group/personal identity.
Panel Four – 'And in 2184, we were blind to truth of our own existence'
Dank, dirty rain-washed alleywaywith an over flowing dumpster.
Background – At the mouth of thealleyway stand two Enforcers[2]in there new-age style Templar armour.
Foreground – Hiding behind thedumpster is a young man dressed in torn jeans and hooded jumper. He has noshoes on and his feet are bloody and torn from running. He is pale, darkhaired, skinny and very stick looking.
Enforcer 1# - 'Did you see somethingdown there?'
Enforcer2# - 'Just a rat, let'sgo!'
Enforcer1# - 'But…'
Enforcer2# - 'No buts, You heardwhat he did to the men over in Omicron Sector. Report in and let's get out ofhere.'
Enforcer1# - 'Good call.' On radio'Sigma Sector Clear.' Pause 'No, No sign of him.'
Panel One – 'When even your past Is lost, Where do you turn forsalvation?'
The figure from behind thedumpster running down a now empty alleyway.
Panel Two –
Our figure plunges out in to an adjoining alleyway in to the path of a longEnforcer.
Figure– 'Oh Damn!'
Enforcer – 'You!' pointing a gunat the figure, on radio 'The Archetype has been located in the…'
Panel Three –
Although the Enforcer is muchlarger than him, the figure knocks him down with relative ease and plunges in acrowded main street losing the enforcer.
Panel Four
Lost in the crowed he is buffetedby people walking in to him. All the people surrounding him have vacant,emotionless faces. They do not look at him or even stop when they walk in tohim. He makes his way through the crowed street as he is trampled and pushed.
Page Three
Panel One
He makes it out of the streetanother quiet back alleyway
Looking back at the street 'Theycan't see me, feel me or even hear me. But why?'
Panel Two
Exhausted he walks down the alleyway,away from busy crowed towards an empty street.
Panel Three
He stumbles out in to a quietstreet. Rain pouring down, the only sign of life is a red haired women furtherup the street wrapped in a red rain coat with an umbrella.
Figure - 'I'm just a ghost…'
Panel Four
He slumps down on the edge of thepavement in despair, his feet in the gutter he watches his reflection in thewater.
Inset: The reflection of twoEnforcers in the water.
Page Four
Being restrainedby two Enforcers
Enforcers1# - 'Got you!'
Enforcer2#- 'This Omega Team to Legion, We have him.'
Over radio – 'Stay put Omega steam, Support isinbound.'
Inthe distance the women in is walking up the street.
Panel Two
The Enforcers ignore the women asshe passes by, assuming that she cannot see there captive.
Due to his struggling the shockhim with a rod.
Panel Three
Hanging limp between the two Enforcers,blood dripping from his mouth he tried to beg the women for her although heknows she cannot she him.
Figure - 'Please…'
Inset – The women winks at him.
Panel Four
The women pulls out two longercurved daggers from inside, slashing the neck of the nearest Enforcer andthrowing the other in to the heart of the second with a shower of sparks
Page Five
Panel One
The two dead Enforcer liebleeding in the street. The young manlies on all fours in between them with the women in red standing over him.
Women – 'Are you all right?'
Figure – 'Lying in in the bloodof two men who were probably about to kill me… I could be worse, Thanks.'
Figure – 'What where the sparks?Are they partly android? '
Panel Two
Closeup of the women removing the blade from the second Templar
Women – 'No, There armour isbionic though. The blades have an EMP plus that shorts them out. If they stabwould dose not kill them, the shock will.'
Panel Three
The womenhelping the young men to his feet
Women– 'What's your name?'
Figure– 'I don't have one. Who were those men?'
Women – 'Enforcers, The Conclaveof Twilights lapdogs. They are scouring the entire city looking for something.I get the feeling that's something is you.'
Figure –'Why?'
Women – 'Save that for later,right now the entire Legion is descending on this sector. We need to get in tocover.'
Panel Four
Walkingacross the street, a door opens and a candle is held out in the rain.
Women- 'That's the sign…'
inet of them entering the building.
Panel One
A hallway, three figure within.Our young man, in his hooded jumper, torn jeans and bloody feet (and now bloodycloths), Our Scarlet Assassin and a third man, tall broad shouldered clad in armourwith a red cloak holding a candle.
Third Man – 'So you're the one that'sstirred up the hive?'
Women– 'He has to be, I thought they were going to execute him on the street.'
Thirdman – 'Would not surprise me, the entirecity is in lock down due to him.'
Women– 'But why? He does not even remember his name'
Third man – 'No, he never had aname. Don't treat him like he is human.'
Women – 'What do you mean?'
Panel Two
Close up of the young manand the third man talking
Third man– 'What is your name?'
Youngman – 'I don't have one.'
Thirdman – 'What is your designation'
YoungMan – 'Archatype-Alpha-001, Titan Class.'
Thirdman – 'See? That's why they are tearing the city apart.'
Panel Three
Third view of the three talking (perhaps over head?)
Women –'He's a bit on the small side…'
Third Man – 'There is a reason for that, let's take him back to base. We captured someone earlier today whocan tell us exactly what we are dealing with…'
S Palmer.
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Email;Stewart[dot]Palmer[at]gmail.com
Skype: ThaneFein
#108
Posted 22 September 2011 - 10:51 PM
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Sorry if this is out of line, but it might be worth one of the mods asking the Chief if the official word should come out that Space Oddities are no longer being accepted?
Since the last harvest of strips there has been no-one picked up (what was that, around 6-9 months ago?)
I'd really hate to see people putting a ton of effort into these strips only for them to languish in comic development hell.
Rich Johnston run a piece about this in bleeding cool.
Edited by Arcadio Bolańos, 22 September 2011 - 10:53 PM.
#109
Posted 12 October 2011 - 06:37 PM
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Hi guys, there's a lot of cool ideas on here! I have a few scripts on the go at the moment but if any writers like my artwork then please get in touch. I'd like to pencil some short scripts (no more than 5 pages preferably) just to get my art moving around out there. You can see some of my work here:
http://rayfavourite.tumblr.com
If you wanna team up please give me a shout but please also understand I have a few commitments to take care of first!
Thanks guys!
Ray Favourite
Hi Ray,
Your work looks great. I have a few short scripts Im looking to self publish, then I have a horror graphic novel that Id be looking to start.
Take a look at one of my shorts, if your interested in working together or want to see more scripts give me a shout
Chris
Page 1
Panel 1: In the foreground, ourmain focus is a woman cradling her injured child. She is sat at the foot of amountain of broken bricks and rubble, covered in cuts and scrapes and she isstaring directly at us, her eyes pleading to us.
All around her is the aftermathof an earth quake in a large town: the buildings are destroyed; cars crushed bythe fallen masonry; the wounded being tended to in the street
Mother: Help me, please.
Caption: So many people werehurt…asking me to help.
Panel 2: The full frame is of aman with his head in his hands, his large hands covering his face as he sobs.
Man: I was so scared…
Michael: I'm so ashamed that I…..
Michael: I just ran
Panel 3: Wide shot to reveal:that the man is in an office – a psychiatrist's office (think psychiatrist's officein The Soprano's).
We see he's a large, dark-haired,muscular man in plain Clark Kentclothes. Opposite him is a woman; glasses, smartly dressed, perfect posture –the psychiatrist.
Woman: That’s a very commonreaction. It was a horrific event
Michael: It is, but not for me
Panel 4: One-shot of thepsychiatrist: a querying look on her face. Her head framed by the many certificateson the wall behind her.
Woman: Why do you say that? Whatmakes you different from everyone else?
Panel 5: One-shot of Michaelgesturing as his anger with himself grows
Michael: I've been in situationslike this a million times before
Michael: As soon as I was old enough,helping people is all I've wanted to do
Panel 6: Two-shot: Michael nowwith his elbows on his knees, looking at the ground. The psychiatrist has not changedposition.
Woman: So what was it about thissituation that was different?
Michael: I don't know….
Page 2
Panel 1: Michael has eased backinto his chair as he opens up
Michael: ….This…it just seemed totrigger something inside me
Panel 2: Closer on Michael,staring into the distance as he retrieves a memory
Woman (O.S): Trigger what?
Michael: It brought back memoriesfrom about 2 years ago
Panel 3: Flash-Back - A distantview of a modern city post bomb detonation: a large plume of smoke rises fromthe centre; two large sky-scrapers are damaged – a bite taken out of theirmetal frame.
Michael: After the bomb went offdown-town
Panel 4: Closer on the city: wesee office blocks with windows blown out; destroyed shop fronts and the vagueforms of lifeless people in the street.
Michael: So many people needed help, more than I could copewith. It was then I realised
Panel 5: Much closer on the cityview: Now we see the bodies clearly: 5 casualties strewn mercilessly amongstthe wreckage by the blast
Michael: No matter what I dothese things just keep happening
Michael: I swore to protect them,but people keep dying
Panel 6: Back to scene: View frombehind the psychiatrist, the back of her head just in shot but the focus is onMichael: head tilted forward, looking down at his palms, overcome with emotion.
Michael: I'm useless…..and theirblood is on my hands
Woman: OK. We'll leave it therefor today
Page 3
Panel 1: The psychiatrist'soffice. She sits with her perfect posture in the middle of the frame. She islooking directly at us, a blank expression on her face.
Panel 2: Cut to her POV –opposite her, in the middle of the frame is the large leather chair where herpatients sit. It is empty.
Panel 3: Close on her watch: itshows 10 minutes past 7
Panel 4: We catch her as she stopswaiting and leaves her chair to return to her desk
Panel 5: Night. In her home study- a space comparable to her office, the walls covered with as many awards andhonours.
Her hair is down, she's morerelaxed. But, she sits typing in the dark illuminated by the glow from hermonitor and a TV mounted on the wall to her right.
Caption: Patient Notes – SubjectMichael Malone (captions to be lettered in Times New Roman or another suitable Fontto emulate her typing up her notes on the computer)
Caption: I fear the worst; he'smissed 2 sessions now. No cancellation phone call. No Nothing
Panel 6: Closer on her – the backof the monitor in the foreground, but the focus is on her as she types
Caption: He takes great personalresponsibility for these events, likely a result of training. Although he won'tsay what it is he does
Page 4
Panel 1: Profile view of her ather desk, so that the TV on the wall is brought into view.
She is looking down away from thescreen rubbing her temples as the late night catches up with her.
Caption: From that I can assumehe's military, maybe Special Forces.
Panel 2 and 3: The TV screen isthe full frame. The channel is a typical rolling news channel.
Along the bottom of the screen isthe banner headline 'Train Crash near Nuclear Plant'
The sub-headline beneath it reads'Super Hero ‘Titanium Man’ stops carriages and prevents further tragedy'.
On screen is a train crash – across country train has come off the rails. Survivors wrapped in blankets are beingled from the scene by police as soldiers tend to the wreckage.
Caption: The news reports of atrain crash this evening. The militaryare at the scene, which means Michael is too.
Caption: Just as we were makinggood progress.
Panel 4: Back on the psychiatrist– the back of the monitor in the foreground, but the focus is on her as shetypes
Caption: He's a long way away froma full recovery. Too many issues still lie below the surface.
Panel 5: Zoom out so that we arelooking at her as she works through the window of her study. We're moving outinto the night to lead onto the next panel.
Caption: Too much too soon andthey'll all come to the top at once
Panel 6: We see Michaeldejectedly walking the street that night, illuminated by the street lights. Athick winter jacket pulled up to his nose
Caption: Like the fact he'sadopted and doesn't know his biological parents
Page 5
Panel 1: Michael stops; noticingsomething, releasing his head from his jacket
Caption: That just increases hisisolation from the real world
Caption: As he tries to find whohe truly is
Panel 2: From behind him we see Michaeldisappearing down an adjacent alleyway, seemingly away from the voice.
Voice (O.S. – faintly lettered toportray that it is a distant voice): Help!
Caption: He's a text book P.T.S.Dcase
Panel 3: In the alleyway: Michael is running towards us, unzipping hisjacket
Caption: The normal outcome forthese guys is a drink or drugs overdose. Or a shotgun to the temple
Panel 4: Close on Michael's chestas he pulls open his shirt and we see the Titanium Man symbol beneath hisclothes
Caption: But, he's a good man. Ican't lose this one
Panel 5 and 6: From outside thealleyway we see Michael (now Titanium Man) fly out, a proud, determined look onhis face as races to help the lone voice.
Caption: He's got to realise thatthe burden isn’t all on him. No one man can take all that.
Caption: He's not Titanium Manafter all.
THE END
#110
Posted 28 October 2011 - 08:23 PM
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After an artist for a large project??
Any offers
peter.brechunec@btinternet.com
Any offers
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#111
Posted 01 November 2011 - 11:22 AM
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Apologies for the double posting! But just to clarify, its me who is after the artist!
I have trouble drawing the curtains!!
cheers.
I have trouble drawing the curtains!!
cheers.
#112
Posted 17 November 2011 - 11:50 PM
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I'm an artist (at least I'm learning to become one) and would love to try this. My work can be found here: http://mxdagger.deviantart.com/
I'm interested in a story that's not over 5 pages (with 2 comics already in production and schoolwork I can make a 5pager in about 2 weeks time) and I would love to find a story that's fun (action or comedy) but as long as it's good I don't really care for the type of the story. If you are interested in collaborating find me on facebook (Mikus Duncis) or my e-mail (saurons25@inbox.lv)
I'm interested in a story that's not over 5 pages (with 2 comics already in production and schoolwork I can make a 5pager in about 2 weeks time) and I would love to find a story that's fun (action or comedy) but as long as it's good I don't really care for the type of the story. If you are interested in collaborating find me on facebook (Mikus Duncis) or my e-mail (saurons25@inbox.lv)
Edited by Mikus Duncis, 17 November 2011 - 11:50 PM.
#113
Posted 18 November 2011 - 11:09 AM
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I'm an artist (at least I'm learning to become one) and would love to try this. My work can be found here: http://mxdagger.deviantart.com/
I'm interested in a story that's not over 5 pages (with 2 comics already in production and schoolwork I can make a 5pager in about 2 weeks time) and I would love to find a story that's fun (action or comedy) but as long as it's good I don't really care for the type of the story. If you are interested in collaborating find me on facebook (Mikus Duncis) or my e-mail (saurons25@inbox.lv)
had a look at your deviantart, looks good man
#114
Posted 08 December 2011 - 03:22 PM
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Hey everyone,
Hope all is well?
I am a Glasgow based comics artist / illustrator looking for willing collaborators for future projects. Links to my work can be found below but a little about myself;
Links to my work can be found here;
www.everythingsayzo.deviantart.com/
http://www.facebook.com/#!/Everythingsayzoillustration
I was never a qualified illustrator, as I had studied film, but it is a field I have always wanted to pursue in one way or another. I am passionate and believe that my blackly comic and subversive imagination riddles a certain entertainment factor with my illustration.
I have produced this kind of illustration for the last two years (about the time I had graduated from University) and have mostly produced storyboards and concept art for TV commercials. One of which I adapted into an award winning animation.
I have little experience in comics but want to apply the illustration style into a form of storytelling. I work quite fast and love imaginative writing but really want to pursue projects with individuals who are determined to make good, but different, work. I have some experience in writing but overall want to collaborate on projects pursuing our sole diciplines. My e-mail is sayzofilms (at) gmail.com.
If you can have a look at the artwork and tell me what you think, we can look at producing some work. Look forward to hearing from you.
Ryan
Hope all is well?
I am a Glasgow based comics artist / illustrator looking for willing collaborators for future projects. Links to my work can be found below but a little about myself;
Links to my work can be found here;
www.everythingsayzo.deviantart.com/
http://www.facebook.com/#!/Everythingsayzoillustration
I was never a qualified illustrator, as I had studied film, but it is a field I have always wanted to pursue in one way or another. I am passionate and believe that my blackly comic and subversive imagination riddles a certain entertainment factor with my illustration.
I have produced this kind of illustration for the last two years (about the time I had graduated from University) and have mostly produced storyboards and concept art for TV commercials. One of which I adapted into an award winning animation.
I have little experience in comics but want to apply the illustration style into a form of storytelling. I work quite fast and love imaginative writing but really want to pursue projects with individuals who are determined to make good, but different, work. I have some experience in writing but overall want to collaborate on projects pursuing our sole diciplines. My e-mail is sayzofilms (at) gmail.com.
If you can have a look at the artwork and tell me what you think, we can look at producing some work. Look forward to hearing from you.
Ryan
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Hi all,
Not sure if this is the right place to post this seeing as it isn't specifically for the clint submissions but,
I'm an artist working on my portfolio. And looking for a 1-5 page script to have a go at. Any style really, I just ask that the script is considered finished (because I may have a crack at lettering aswell)and that I can show it on my portfolio site, with the writers credit and link of course. check out my portfolio here
Thanks for reading
Not sure if this is the right place to post this seeing as it isn't specifically for the clint submissions but,
I'm an artist working on my portfolio. And looking for a 1-5 page script to have a go at. Any style really, I just ask that the script is considered finished (because I may have a crack at lettering aswell)and that I can show it on my portfolio site, with the writers credit and link of course. check out my portfolio here
Thanks for reading
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Posted 22 January 2012 - 09:12 AM
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I'm looking for a collaborator on a mini-series I'm writing - set in the late 60's, early 70's its a conspriacy thriller revolving around secret CIA ops
Id love to hear from anyone interested in working together
Id love to hear from anyone interested in working together
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Posted 10 February 2012 - 12:56 PM
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Posted 19 February 2012 - 03:13 PM
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Hi all,
Not sure if this is the right place to post this seeing as it isn't specifically for the clint submissions but,
I'm an artist working on my portfolio. And looking for a 1-5 page script to have a go at. Any style really, I just ask that the script is considered finished (because I may have a crack at lettering aswell)and that I can show it on my portfolio site, with the writers credit and link of course. check out my portfolio here
Thanks for reading
Stephen,
Checked out your portfolio and there are some really cool pieces. I like a number of the illustrations, particularly the one of guy in the horned helmet and the angelic figures atop the spires. Good stuff man. If I get a script together I may hit you up.
-A.A.
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Posted 28 February 2012 - 01:45 AM
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If there is anyone who wants to do a story about a prophet at the end of his life, drop me a line. I'm a writer. Looking for an artist.
love some more details, send me your first few pages of script if you like
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